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08 Oct 2017 | Target Mains | Question 7

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  •  Narayana Sarma @narayanacbe

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    •  Pritam Kumar @pritam_cd

      -Introduction is poor…sentences are not linked…also it does not show complete picture…Here we need to talk about how rapidly increasing urbanisation attracts more migration…and other causes…then we can link that these urbanisation create myriad of problems for migrant workers….
      -Need to show the problems in point no 3…2nd page…Point 4 seems incomplete…does not speak clearly about problems…
      -We need to talk about…Restricted access to basic needs such as identity documentation, social entitlements, housing, and financial services.
      Many migrants—especially those who relocate to a place where the local language and culture is different from that of their region of origin—also face harassment and political exclusion…etc…
      -We also need to talk about already running government schemes which can be helpful in this regard…Skill development, Start up and stand up India, PM Housing schemes etc…
      -Solution shown is good…need to bring more…talk about PM housing schemes for all by 2030 is a welcome step in this regard…talk about labour social welfare committee should be established…workers association should monitor and inspect the working areas for the safety and support of labourers…Govt should step in more effectively by framing laws and regulation in this regard….etc…

      Your points seems to be very general…need to bring specificity…
      However, good effort…keep practicing…will improve…
      Marks awarded: 4/10

    •  Narayana Sarma @narayanacbe

      I will try to be specific henceforth @pritam_cd sir. Thanks a lot!

  •  Avinash Mishra @avinash-mishra

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    •  Pritam Kumar @pritam_cd

      -Introduction is a bit long…exceeded the word limit…its not relevant to mention about checking train and various railway stations…Introduction should talk about Migration…and its various reasons in short (not very explained)…
      -Value Conflict point is incomplete…
      -Under to improve employment opportunity…talk about skill India, start up India and stand up India schemes etc…
      -Good conclusion…
      Overall your approach is good…need to stick to the word limit…just remove the irrelevant points and abstain from explaining less important points too much…
      Keep practicing…
      Marks awarded: 4.5/10

    •  Avinash Mishra @avinash-mishra

      Thank you, sir, the train thing was just an effort to present differently, I get your point.Thanks once again.

  •  Parvathy @parvathy2490

    Urban spaces act as economic magnets which attracts large scale of rural population in search of better economic opportunities.
    This process is called migration . Migration apart from economic opportunities has a significant impact on socio-cultural life of these rural migrants.
    impact on social life:
    1. they now tend to live in a heterogeneous society where caste differences are quite insignificant.
    2. a new criteria for social stratification is developed i.e. class based society.
    3. they now share their dwellings, foods, etc with each other irrespective of caste.
    4. mostly engaged in unorganized sector, they work as daily wage workers thus no regular income or job security.
    5.mostly they dwell in slums, addicted to alcoholism, and even get indulged in vandalism and other such crimes.
    impact on cultural life-
    1.it help them to leave many rural stereotypes behind, and promotes a sense of need based interaction among people belonging to various regions. it is the homogeneity of the work, which binds them together.
    2.alienation – from family, village life, cultures, festivals
    3. they are most often prone to abuses by urban dwellers- women (prostitution), children(child labour)
    4. urban outlook in thinking process, dialect, clothing, fast moving life,etc.
    though urabanization provides plethora of opportunities for rural migrants, it brings challenges also. thus, it is the duty of state to solve these issues. various gov. initiatives like housing fo all by 2022, street vendors bill, aadhar based service delivery are commendable.

    •  Pritam Kumar @pritam_cd

      -Mention the reasons for migration in short in introduction…this will bring completeness…
      -some of the points under problems faced need explanation…though ideas mentioned are good…also add…exploitation by employers…less wages…no work as per the will, stiff competition etc…
      -Your answer is incomplete…have not mentioned any solution to preserve their culture and social values…Also need to mention about already running government schemes like skill India, start up India and stand up India, Mudra etc…which can be helpful for migrant workers…
      -Conclusion should be comprehensive…based on the facts what we have mentioned in answer…

      Though good approach…need to write complete answer asked in question…

      Marks awarded: 3/10

    •  Parvathy @parvathy2490

      Thanks a lot Prit Sir

  •  Khemchand Gujjar @khemchand-gujjar

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      -Bring clarity in first para…mention the reason for migration in short…in introduction itself…
      -Rather than writing about the problems faced in paragraphs…we can enumerate them in order to bring clarity and more convenience for readers…
      -Also need to mention about the already running government schemes which can be helpful for these migrant people…like…skill India, start up India and stand up India schemes, housing for all schemes etc…
      -However, good approach…The rest of the points and ideas are good…keep practicing…
      Marks awarded: 4/10

  •  Vk Kumar @vkkumar

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      -Introduction is okay…
      -Points and ideas mentioned are good…but are in general form…try mentioning some already running government schemes and programs which can be helpful for these migrants like… skill India, start up India and stand up India schemes, Housing for All scheme etc…
      -Conclusion is empty…what sort of facilities you want from government side…need to mention clearly in short…
      However, your approach is good…and answer is also good…can be made excellent…keep practicing…
      Marks awarded: 5/10

  •  varnit sharma @varnit-sharma

    The increasing population of Urban areas as compared to total population is known as urbanisation.The phenomena of urbanisation is not new to India.Various Urbana centers in ancient as well as in medieval period had prosperoused and flourished in India .However,in recent some decades,the growing urban population has produced various challenges in terms of urban overcrowding,shrinkage and deterioration of infrastructure and public facilities,environmental related problems and compositional and structural change in society and economy .Since,urbanisation is very often driven by migration of people from rural to urban areas,the process of urbanisation in turn has greatly affected the lives of rural migrants in urban areas.
    Urbanisation has affected the rural migrants in following ways-
    1.Rural migrants migrate to cities by push and pull factor.Better economic opportunities is one of pull as well as push factor for rural migrants.With increasing migration of rural population in urban areas for economic opportunities,the informal labour in urban center has increased.This has led to deterioration of quality of life of rural migrants who are living in urban areas.
    2.Urbanisation has bring transformative changes in the attitude of rural migrants.rural people have become open and dynamic in their thinking.
    3.In most of the cases,it has been seen that growing urbanisation has increased the cases of violence against rural migrants.Rural migrants have seen as outsiders by urban population.
    4.more significant impact on rural migrants by urbanisation has seen in the exposure of rural migrants to new technological changes.Rural migrants have become carries of new ideas and technology from urban to rural areas.This has also caused considerable changes in the life style of rural people.
    5.One,disadvantage which has brought by urbanisation is erosion of cultural and social values of rural migrants in cities.
    Thus,urbanisation has both positives and negative impacts on rural migrants.However,the impact of urbanisation on social and cultural values of rural people is more significant.Rural migrants in urban areas often live in isolation and fell deprived of their core cultural and social values.Their cultural and social values are seen as alien by urban communities and they face discrimination with respect to these values.
    Preservation of cultural and socual value is most important for maintaining integrity of the society.following measures should be taken to preserve these values-
    1.Arrest of the migration of people from rural areas to urban areas must be the priority of government.Government has taken various initiatives in this regard for example-PURA,NURLM etc.
    2.government encourage people to organise the community festivals in urban areas.This would help in doing away the sense of aleiniation among rural migrants.
    3.Proper attention should also be given to adress various challenges faced by rural migrants like poverty,unemployment,malnutrition etc.In this regard also,government has taken various initiatives.
    Thus,Though growing population is urban areas is a big challenge and initiatives to arrest this growth is utmost important,preserving social and cultural values of rural migrants is equally important.

    •  Pritam Kumar @pritam_cd

      -Exceeded the word limit…there is no point in providing the feedback on this answer…expertise lies when we write too many points/ideas in limited words…checkout some of the irrelevant points…
      -The introduction you have explained like explaining an essay…so much details not needed…avoid temporal scale here…
      -Ideas in points are too general and too elaborative…need specific points with short and crisp explanation…
      -Need to mention more of already running government schemes…like… skill India, start up India and stand up India schemes, PM housing scheme etc…which can be helpful for these migrant workers…
      -Ideas mentioned in 2nd part is good…
      -Overall the answer is general…need to synchronise the words, sentences in order to stick to the word limit…keep practicing…
      Marks awarded: 4/10

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