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17 Aug 2017 | GS 3 | What do you understand by sex semen technology. Discuss the usefulness of sex semen technology for our dairy sector?

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  •  arjun choudhary @arjun-choudhary1

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    •  RK Sahoo @ramakant-sahoo

      Official Cd Review:
      – good intro and content enriched answer…presentation could be improved slightly…in the challenges section you could write complete sentences rather than just half baked keywords…( would make your answer or point more presentable, underlining will anyway highlight your keywords.)
      – Otherwise very good content…conclusion could have been better…
      Marks awarded: 5.5/10

  •  HI-M @ladies-corner

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    •  RK Sahoo @ramakant-sahoo

      Official Cd review:
      – intro is way too long…Concise the concept part…nevertheless, full marks to structure and flow…..
      – you have crossed the word limit handsomely…avoid redundancy like 50;50 chance point of the outcome of the traditional AI technique…
      – Issues doesn’t include few key points like cost burdens of 2000rs/straw, cumbersome procedures etc… A couple of concluding lines also is missing..
      Otherwise good attempt…needs fine tuning and adhering to space and time constraints..
      Marks Awarded: 5/10

    •  HI-M @ladies-corner

      thank u sir.

  •  LLJ @l-lj

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    •  RK Sahoo @ramakant-sahoo

      Please be careful while uploading your answers!!

  •  sam @sam-r1o

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    •  RK Sahoo @ramakant-sahoo

      Official Cd Review:
      – The introduction is decent..instead of arrows you could just put “xx”, “xY” in brackets itself… Few mistakes in sentence framing and language…( 2nd para, last part- doesn’t convey clear ideas)
      – You have resorted to unnecessary redundancy and irrelevant in the body rather than just hitting the point straightaway..targeted content missing in body and logical flow too….you could have structured your body into advantages and disadvantages…
      – Way forward is too general..needed more concrete points ( refer to the article above)
      – Please work on the above areas…can do much much better..
      Marks Awarded: 3.5/10

    •  sam @sam-r1o

      sir,Thank you for review, will improve next time

  •  LLJ @l-lj

    Apologies for wrong upload earlier

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    •  RK Sahoo @ramakant-sahoo

      Official Cd Review:
      – The introduction is way too long..use your space and time wisely…you could have elaborated how sst works in the intro itself and jump to advantages….
      – You have resorted to too many general points in the body( refer to the oped article) targeted content missing in body.. use specifics like how cost burdens( 2000rs/straw, monopoly issues…analysis is not up to mark..

      – you have good articulation and language skills, just Work on more specific content building…
      – Please work on the above areas…can do much much better..
      Marks Awarded: 4/10

  •  Vk Kumar @vkkumar

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      OFFICIAL CD REVIEW:
      – The second para can be pruned further..concise it where is not a priority…use content, time and space judiciously…
      – too general points in the body..more concrete and specific points needed…mention the figure ( eg: rs 2000/per straw as the cost burden , other points in issues like cumbersome procedures)
      – A para about few suggestions/ way forward is missing…
      -Conclusion is very good…keep it up!
      -work more on targeted content…such technical questions demands specific and more diverse points…
      Otherwise, well attempted..can do much better..
      Marks awarded: 4.5/10

    •  Vk Kumar @vkkumar

      Thanks a lot sir for detailed and encouraging review. will keep improving.

  •  Mohit Raj @mohitraj

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      OFFICIAL CD REVIEW:
      -Brilliant articulation and structuring…introduction and elaboration in the intro part can be further concised…use your content, time and space wisely…
      – issues could have included, cost figures per straw, cumbersome procedures etc..
      -Way forward: better usage of words like indigenous breeds…
      – conclusion is missing…could have included that at a time when slaughter houses ban male calves and need for raising farmers income, SST provides the glimmer of hope despite its few drawbacks..
      -Otherwise, good attempt, can really do much better…good command over language …try and maximise your marks in such questions…
      Marks Awarded: 5/10

    •  Mohit Raj @mohitraj

      Really really beneficial for me getting reviewed…Would workout deficiencies…:-) Thank you Sir !!

  •  Aditya Pokra @adipokra

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