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Question 1)

There has been a perceptible change in Indian policy vis-à-vis Pakistan, with focus on ‘diplomatic isolation’ and ‘use of hard power’. What are the possible benefits of this policy? Asses the long term efficacy of this policy. (250 Words)

Question 2)

India has emerged as a surrogacy hub for couples from other countries. How efficient will Surrogacy (Regulation) Bill be in addressing it. Critically analyse.(250 words)

Question 3)

In the midst of increasing centralising tendencies in recent times, it is important to reaffirm the values of federalism at every forum. Discuss. (250 words)

Question 4)

Given below are the two quotations of moral thinkers/philosophers. What they mean to you and why they are still relevant? (a) ‘Those who do ill shall suffer more if they are not caught than those that are’. [Boethius] (b) ‘The king should surrender his individuality in the interest of his duty’. [Kautilya]

 

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Vishvjeet Holkar
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parth verma
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Hi Vishvjeet
Work on your intro. Read the model answer to understand how to approach the intro.
If writing in bullet points then do mention what is the subheading of the discussion? Otherwise there will be no structure and presentation in the answer.
Where you have used subheadings, the statement is not clear. What do you mean by the sub heading of “federal provision like”???
Vishvjeet work on your language, presentation. Its lacking a lot.
The content of the answer is quite weak because of weak explanation and weak presentation.
Read the model answers.

Marks: 1.5

Vishvjeet Holkar
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parth verma
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Again weak intro.
What is the meaning of sub heading “New India?” Please avoid social media kind of language,
What is the recent events between India and Pakistan? Mention strikes like Uri or Pulwama and Balakot air strike of India.
No need to give map of India and Pakistan
Your second part is much better.
read the model answer here too.
You have to write a lot in order to improve your skills, specially language and structure.
Read the answers of fellow students like Kunal Agrawal, Nora or Varsha etc.

Marks: 2

Vishvjeet Holkar
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parth verma
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If i comment on the structure then its a much better answer. Your direction of the answer is decent and you have all the necessary areas covered.
But when it comes to your content and explanation, answer lags a lot. You have to have better command on your language. Points are just mentioned and not discussed or the grammar is poor in many cases.
You have to work on it.
No way forward in the answer.
read the model answer.

Marks: 2.5

Vishvjeet Holkar
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parth verma
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a. weak example but good direction.
You have understood the crux of the issue but need to address in better way.
No conclusion in the discussion.

b. Again you know the meaning of the statement but failed to discuss it in better manner.
Discussion ends abruptly.
Example is weak

Marks: 1.5

Mohsin Khursheed
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parth verma
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Quite large intro.
Do not write lengthy statements. It should be short and crisp.
You have right content but need better presentation in order to encash it.
You are scrambling to put maximum points without giving due importance to the structure or presentation of the answer.
There is technically no space between different points and it seems that everything is enjoined.
In terms of content, the answer is good but it can only fetch you that much marks. Imagine reading 20 answers in such cramped manner. It will affect youyr overall marks.
Avoid it.
Points are good. Both the parts are handled well.
Marks: 3.5

Mohsin Khursheed
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parth verma
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Once again, very large paragraph. You will have two pages for 10 markers and 3 pages for 15 markers. Use them to your advantage.
Discussion in both the statements are good and detailed.
But examples are needed in the ethics answer.

Marks: 3.5

avani k
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parth verma
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Hi Avani
the content and direction of the answer is really impressive.
No need to give India Pak map.
All the parts are nicely dealt with.
But towards the end, do mention the cons of these strategies.
Overall subtle discussion. Language is fine

Marks: 4.5

avani k
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parth verma
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Quite a reasonable answer.
Points, language, structure, presentation; all are outstanding.
Your command on language and your explanation is smooth.
To make t near perfect answer, briefly mention the importance of centralization in India. Just briefly.
good conclusion.

Marks: 6.5

avani k
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parth verma
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In depth discussion.
All the parts are covered in suitable manner.
Good examples.
Overall decent attempt.

Marks: 5.5

avani k
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parth verma
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Way forward is missing.
If the question is asking about any bill, law, act, scheme or program then you have to mention the way forwards if there are any issues with them
SO make it a habit of discussing them separately, rather than using them as your concluding statement.
Rest of the discussion is comprehensive.
Points have width and depth.
Structure is superb and explanation is first rate.

Marks: 4.5

sourav singh
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parth verma
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Hi Sourav. We do not have access to your answers.
Please upload them here like everyone else to get them reviewed

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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Hi Utkarsh
Answer has some very good points, specially in the last part where you discussed the efficacy of the approach.
But while you are at it, do give balancing points by discussing the cons of this approach.
Rest of the answer is fine and attempted with decent coverage.

Marks: 5.5

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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What are the intended benefits of the bill?
You can discuss points regarding control on fertility tourism; end of exploitation of poor women; fulfills the recommendations of Law Commission; in the interest of child; Regulates the Clinics; gives boost to adoption etc.
Rest of the answer is OK.
Good intro and 1st part of the answer.
Way forwards can be made better in terms of coverage. read the model answer.

Marks: 4.5

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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parth verma
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I am answering about your federal answer.

After intro, describe Indian Constitution nature regarding federalism.
After discussing the recent issues with over centralization, do discuss the two issues:
1. how it threatens federalism in India.
2. the importance of centralization in India.
The discussion on these two points should be just brief.
Rest of the answer is superb

marks: 3.5

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
Admin

Wrong upload

Vishal Kalal
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parth verma
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Hi Vishal
Apart from the concluding part of the answer, nothing is wrong.
You have to work on our presentation a bit.
Points in the 1st and 2nd parts are excellent and their coverage is decent.
Some way forwards before concluding statements are needed.

Marks: 3.5

Vishal Kalal
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parth verma
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the main question is about The Surrogacy Regulation Bill and most part of the answer is given to surrogacy and not the bill The first mention of the topic comes in the middle of the 2nd part. There are no highlights of the bill.
The required template of these kids of questions (when a bill, act, program, scheme or law is asked):
Introduce the topic briefly in your intro
Highlight its salient features
Why do we need this bill or law or scheme/expected benefits of the bill or law or scheme
What are the issues with the bill/scheme/program
Suggest solutions to fill those loopholes and then concluding paragraph.

You have discussed surrogacy and its demerits in length but that was not required.
Simple:
Give data explaining India being a hub of commercial surrogacy.
List provisions of the bill.
Suggest how they try to address these problems.
List how they fall short of goals or create other problems.
Conclude suggesting some reforms in the existing bill.

Marks: 3

Vishal Kalal
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parth verma
Admin

After intro, describe Indian Constitution nature regarding federalism.
After discussing the recent issues with over centralization, do discuss the two issues:
1. how it threatens federalism in India.
2. the importance of centralization in India.
The discussion on these two points should be just brief.
No need to give points regarding Rajya Sabha and Article 368. Its not related to issue of federalism.
There are many more points like use of official language, 15th Finance Commission; Article 263 etc.
Good way forwards. Do not copy from the notes though! Use your own language and frame these points in your own words

Marks: 4.5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
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Hi Prakhar
Discuss in brief the history of India Pakistan relations and the threats to Indian security emanating from Pakistan and its long standing role in Kashmir and exporting terror to India.
Rest of the answer is gold class
You have covered all the aspects of issue in excellent manner.
There is required balance in the answer.
Content and discussion of the answer are all embracing.
Good conclusion.

Marks: 6

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
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Points in your last part like slow judiciary and policing and implementation are something which the bill cannot handle. They are external issues which are not related to the negatives of the bill as such. When discussing issues with the bill r an issue then try to stay to the issue itself and not discuss outside elements.
read the model answer for this.
Proper way forwards are needed in this answer.
Rest of the answer is OK.

marks: 2.5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
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After intro, describe Indian Constitution nature regarding federalism.
After discussing the recent issues with over centralization, do discuss the two issues:
1. how it threatens federalism in India.
2. the importance of centralization in India.
The discussion on these two points should be just brief.
Excellent way forwards.
Good that you mentioned Sarkaria and Punchi Commissions.
Whatever points you have discussed are comprehensive.
Good command on language.

Marks: 4.5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
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Overall in depth discussion.
Explanations are nice
All the parts are covered in suitable manner.
There are no examples though which is an issue.

Marks: 4

noira khan
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parth verma
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Hi Noira
What is the point of discussing features of bill and provisions of the bill? A’int both the same?
Apart from the discussion on the issues with the bill, rest of discussion are general in nature and just touch the issues from above.
Depth and coverage, which are unique features of your answers, are missing in this answer.
Weak way forward
Marks: 2.5

noira khan
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parth verma
Admin

After intro, describe Indian Constitution nature regarding federalism.
After 1st part of the answer, do discuss the two issues:
1. how it threatens federalism in India.
2. the importance of centralization in India.
The discussion on these two points should be just brief.
Excellent way forwards.
Conclusion is missing
Whatever points you have discussed are comprehensive.
Decent presentation.
Good use of flowchart

Marks: 5.5

pranab prakash
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Q1

parth verma
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Hi Pranab
You have just mentioned various points regarding steps taken by the Indian side against Pakistan without actually following the demands of the question.
You were supposed to critical analyze these steps.
You were supposed to give both sides of the arguments and discuss what are the possible benefits and negatives of these policies?
You were asked to asses the long term efficacy of these policies.
You missed on these cue.

Marks: 2

pranab prakash
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Q2

parth verma
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Excellent start to the answer but do give the intro about the bill as well. You have just mentioned the bill in the answer without even mentioning anything about it in the intro or subsequent part. At least mention “keeping these in mind, Union Cabinet recently cleared the re-introduction of Surrogacy regulation Bill in parliament” and then mention the features of the bill.
While your discussion is decent but do use sub headings in order to show what are you discussing in the answer. Otherwise its just points points and points in the answers. Avoid this way of presenting answer.
Very good points in way forward.
But conclusion is missing

Marks: 4.5

pranab prakash
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Q3

parth verma
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Good 1st part of the answer.
Do mention the TOR of 15th Finance Commission.
After 1st part of the answer, do discuss the two issues:
1. how it threatens federalism in India.
2. the importance of centralization in India.
The discussion on these two points should be just brief.
Excellent way forwards.
You can add points from Punchi Sarkaria and 2nd AR Commissions. These are important facets in federalism issue.

Marks: 4.5

Parth Ranjan
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parth verma
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Hi Parth
You have covered all the aspects of issue in excellent manner.
To give required balance in the answer, you must briefly discuss the cons of these steps.
Content and discussion of the answer are all embracing.
Good conclusion.

Marks: 4.5

Parth Ranjan
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parth verma
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Your answer has all the necessary elements that are required in this answer.
Excellent discussion on surrogacy market in India.
Way forwards are exhaustive and yet to the point. Keep it up.
Overall excellent attempt.

marks: 6

Varsha Chauhan
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parth verma
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Hi Varsha
Excellent start to the answer
But do give the intro about the bill as well.
You have just mentioned the bill in the answer without even mentioning anything about it in the intro or subsequent part.
At least mention “keeping these in mind, Union Cabinet recently cleared the re-introduction of Surrogacy regulation Bill in parliament” and then mention the features of the bill.
Rest of the answer is inclusive of all the dimensions required from the answer.
Way forwards and conclusion are superb. Keep it up.
Good command on language.

Marks: 4.5

Varsha Chauhan
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parth verma
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Quite an outstanding answer.
Points, language, structure, presentation; all are adequate.
Your command on language and your explanation is smooth.
Very good examples quoted in the answer.
Good conclusion.

Marks: 6

Deepak Kumar
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