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11th July 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement

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Question 1)

Pottery has been known as lyrics of handicraft and significantly symbolized the status of culture and society. Elaborate. (250 W)

Question 2)

Reservation is seen as the solution to hide distortions of contemporary economic development. In this context suggest implications of granting of quota not based on constitutinal directives.(250 words)

Question 3)

The National Crime Records Bureau (NCRB) released a Request for Proposal for an Automated Facial Recognition System (AFRS). Critically analyse impact of such technology.(250 Words)

Question 4)

What is the difference between ‘Convention’ and ‘Law’? Which of these two should be given more attention while taking administrative decisions with regard to the tribal regions? In ethical parlance, which of the above two deserves more compliance? (250 W)

 

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Prakhar Bharadwaj
1 year ago

Q1 paid

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Parth Verma
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1 year ago

Hi Prakhar
Very good discussion.
You have covered all the necessary elements of the topic.
The discussion is short and simple.
Nothing wrong in the answer be it content, structure, presentation.

Marks: 6

Prakhar Bharadwaj
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
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1 year ago

The discussion revolves a lot on the technicality of the recent directives from UP government but lacks proper discussion regrading the demand of the question.
Simple direction to the question is:
Give instances of recent granting quota
Give constitutional Criteria for granting quota
Discuss why there is a rise in such quota
Suggest challenges due to this
Conclude suggesting some way forward.

DO mention other instances like Maratha quote etc.

Marks: 2.5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago

Very good answer.
Your coverage is decent in terms of structure.
But in order to get more out of your answer, you should quote more examples.
Apart from that, everything is covered in nice manner.
Balance is perfect in all the three parts of the main body.

Marks: 5.5

sourav singh
1 year ago
Ashok Reddy
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Ashok Reddy

Hi Ashok
After intro, do discuss some of the features of the proposed Automated Facial Recognition System and its intended application as mentioned by the National Crime Records Bureau.
Do mention more points in the expected benefits of the system. Right now, the points are less and general.
Rest of the answer is OK.
Good concluding statements.

Marks: 3

pranita kale
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  pranita kale

Hi Pranita
Very comprehensive discussion.
But in terms of structure, after intro, do discuss some of the features of the proposed Automated Facial Recognition System and its intended application as mentioned by the National Crime Records Bureau.
I am not sure whether the proposed system will help us in health care sector. Please read the model answer in this regard.
Quite a good language and statements are well placed.
Good last part of the answer.

Marks: 5

Mohsin Khursheed
1 year ago

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This time iv’e put some focus on spacing and it did reduce the time lf completion of my answer as well
Thank You Sir

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Mohsin Khursheed
1 year ago

Sir you mentioned about not writing long paragraphs in my answers but i do so only in questions where the directive word is “critically analyse” as it allows me to express the issue in one go
Please tell me how to modify this approach so i can give the answer both and interesting and a fresh look (as we see in editorials mostly)
Thank you

Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago

Editorials and mains answer have same content but their presentation is different. Paragraph style is more suited for essay paper and but there also focus is on short paragraphs. Read the answers of noira khan or varsha chauhan or kunal agarwal. They have discussed the same content like you but their presentation is different.
Or simply read the model answers. See that they have bullet point approach in them.

Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago

Hi Mohsin
Your direction is on the right track but there is some issues with presentation and structure.
You have tried to change some of your technique which is evident in the 1st part of the answer.
But after intro, do discuss some of the features of the proposed Automated Facial Recognition System and its intended application as mentioned by the National Crime Records Bureau.
Read the model answer in this regard.
In this 2nd part, your ling paragraphs and long statements comes back again. Avoid it.
Also do mention in concrete form that what are the issues with the AFRS. Read the model answer for this too.
Very good way forwards and their categorisation is top notch.

Marks: 3

Mohsin Khursheed
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago

Better intro is needed. Right now it is not related to the demand. For better approach, whenever a question has three distinct sub questions attached to it, then rather than using intro, use the 1st part of the question and discuss that as your intro. That will save your time and space and this is the better approach for such kinds of questions.
Hence rather than discussing the differences, define both of them in two separate short paragraphs and that would be your intro of the answer. That way you wont have to discuss the differences separately.
In the 2nd part, very lengthy paragraph and it looks as if never ending discussion on tribal question. Give a break between the 1st part of the paragraph and the example regarding animal and DM….
In the last part, discussion is required in terms of in “ethical parlance”. So you should have kept this in mind.

Marks: 3.5

pranita kale
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  pranita kale

Lengthy 1st half.
In the intro itself you have to introduce the issue of UP and Maharashtra Quota. That should be done and dusted in the intro itself.
Then in the 1st part of the main body, discuss what are the salient provisions regarding reservation and how these measures from the states hurt those provisions.
What is the reason for this growing trend of going beyond those provisions?
What is the side effect of these steps by various governments?
You had to discuss these in the 1st parts of the answer which was not done properly.
2nd part is comparatively better handled.
Better way forward.

Marks: 2.5

Chester
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Chester

Hi Utkarsh
You dont have to discuss reasons for the reservation after intro.
In the intro, do mention recent issues in reservation system like EWS, Maratha quota and UP Government’s decision to gve SC status to various OBC castes.
Yadavs in Bihar and UP did not come out on street? They were in OBC list since starting. Avoid these factually incorrect statements.
The question is not about the analysis of demands of better placed castes for reservation.
Its about recent decisions made my states for the reservation which has effected the dynamics of reservation and its constitutionality.
What is the reason for this growing trend of going beyond those provisions?
What is the side effect of these steps by various governments?
You had to discuss these in the 1st parts of the answer which was not done properly.
You lost the demand of the question. Read it carefully.

Marks: 2

Chester
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Chester

After intro, do discuss some of the features of the proposed Automated Facial Recognition System and its intended application as mentioned by the National Crime Records Bureau.
Read the model answer in this regard.
Rest of the answer is decent.
Good balance in both parts.
Decent way forwards.

Marks: 3.5

Chester
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Chester

The 1st and 2nd part of the questions are covered in better manner.
But the last part is not covered in your discussion where you were supposed to answer: “In ethical parlance, which of the above two deserves more compliance?”
Give more examples in your 2nd part in Tribal discussion.

Marks: 3.5

pranita kale
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  pranita kale

The intro is quite lengthy and have some unnecessary discussion. You can remove half of the discussion there.
It would have been better if you divided your answer into various subheadings like neolithic, chalcolithic, Harappan, vedic, post vedic era and discussed the pottery in such trends.
Your discussion’s direction is good but there are many things which should not be there in the answer or whose absence would not have affected the answer.
Language is decent and good use of diagram.

Marks: 3

Shivangi Uliana
Shivangi Uliana
1 year ago

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Shivangi Uliana
Shivangi Uliana
1 year ago

Sir, kindly check my answers of 11th july. I am a paid student

Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago

Hi Shrivangi
You started really well but the main body is not suited for the current question.
Right now your answer is reflecting various features of pottery in various era. But instead you should have discussed how pottery of different era reflected about the culture and prevalent system of the society.
There are mentions of these here and there but the answer should have focused solely on this facet of the pottery.
Your division of discussion various era is good.

Marks: 1.5

Kunal Aggarwal
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Kunal Aggarwal

Hi Kunal
You can remove the 1st two paragraphs and instead use 3rd paragraph as your intro for the answer.
These two paragraphs are making your intro quite bulky and stretched.
You could have discussed a bot more about relevance of pottery in telling us about the society of that era. Like how they showed us prevalence of agriculture, trade, social stratification etc.
Overall discussion is decent.

Marks: 4

Kunal Aggarwal
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Kunal Aggarwal

Very good answer.
You have covered all the necessary arguments in the answer in holistic manner.
Balance of the answer is perfect.
Coverage, depth and language, everything is decent.
Keep writing like this.

Marks: 6.5

Kunal Aggarwal
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Kunal Aggarwal

Comprehensive answer.
You have discussed proposed benefits of the system after intro, but after intro, do discuss some of the features of the proposed Automated Facial Recognition System and its intended application as mentioned by the National Crime Records Bureau.
Rest of the answer is well placed.
Good points and nice coverage.
The angle of privacy is explored rightly in 2nd part.
Very good way forwards

Marks: 5.5

Kunal Aggarwal
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Kunal Aggarwal

Very lengthy intro. Avoid this.
You can use the example as your second para and make the intro smaller.
Your discussion in the 1st and 2nd parts of the question are well placed but the last part where you were supposed to discuss the ethical angle needs more content and discussion which is lacking presently.
Example of genital mutilation is OK but do give examples quoting tribal experiences. That will be more relevant for the answer.
Overall good discussion but do work on the missing 3rd part.
marks: 3.5

Mohsin Khursheed
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago

Its not Mandal Case. Its Indra Sawhney & Others Vs.Union Of India case.
The answer is in bits and pieces and there is no proper structure.
Your intro has to simply mention the recent events regarding granting of reservation in various states by central government which goes against the constitutional set up.
Then do mention the constitutional mandate regarding measures and what is the reason for the rise in such quota and then suggest challenges due to this
You have mentioned implications but your discussion on the reasons are very general and poor.
Agriculture growth, unemployment, low growth rate, skewed delivery of social sector schemes etc. are the reasons.
Read the answer of Kunal Agarwal to know how to approach this question.
Way forwards are quite weak.

Marks: 2

Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago

Hi Vishvjeet
Please use better and relevant sub headings. What is the meaning of India and economic disparities? Instead use “reasons for increasing trend for reservation in India”
Points discussed there are very general and not at all explained.
Your overall discussion is on right track but your manner of putting them is not efficient. Points are way too general. Language is weak and there is no explanation.
Read the model answers.

marks: 3

Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago

Once again your points are well placed but you have to have right language to present them in efficient manner.
Your structure of the answer is good but its the presentation which is defeating it.
Way forwards need more points.

Marks: 3

Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago

You started really well but the main body is not suited for the current question.
Right now your answer is reflecting various features of pottery in various era. But instead you should have discussed how pottery of different era reflected about the culture and prevalent system of the society.
There are mentions of these here and there but the answer should have focused solely on this facet of the pottery.
Your division of discussion various era is good.

Marks: 2

vinay bhalekar
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  vinay bhalekar

Hi Vinay
Try to stick to the demand of the question.
Right now your answer is reflecting various features of pottery in various era.
But instead you should have discussed how pottery of different era reflected about the culture and prevalent system of the society and what were those.
There are mentions of this in the 1st paragraph of the last page, thus you have given more than 2 pages to discuss some other aspects of pottery; but the answer should have focused solely on this facet of the pottery.
You have to mention those trends and prevalent systems throughout your answer.
Intro is decent.
You do not have to discuss the evolution of pottery from handicraft.

Marks: 1.5

vinay bhalekar
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  vinay bhalekar

You have one of the best presentation skills because of your hand writing and hence you have an advantage over many others. Your command on language is also superb.
But do keep the length of statements small. Keep it crisp.
Very good answer.
You have covered all the necessary arguments in the answer in holistic manner.
Balance of the answer is perfect.
Coverage, depth and language, everything is decent.
Keep writing like this.

Marks: 6.5

vinay bhalekar
1 year ago
Reply to  Parth Verma

Thanks sir, I will definitely focus on the areas which u highlighted…. please review my other answers also

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1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  vinay bhalekar

Comprehensive discussion.
After intro, do discuss some of the features of the proposed Automated Facial Recognition System and its intended application as mentioned by the National Crime Records Bureau.
Rest of the answer is well placed.
Decent points and in depth coverage.
The angle of privacy is explored rightly in 2nd part.
Very good way forwards

Marks: 6

vinay bhalekar
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  vinay bhalekar

Very good answer.
The discussion has perfect balance and it is well suited for the demands of the question.
You have managed to discuss all the three parts of the questions efficiently.
Though look out for the space limit because in 150 words questions, you will be getting only 2 pages. So keep this in mind.
You could have given more and better examples in the middle part of your answer.
Discussion is on the right track and points are exhaustive

Marks: 5

avani k
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  avani k

Hi Avani
You dont have to discuss the cases regarding the reservation.
In the intro, mention the recent cases where state governments or central governments have pushed for reservation like Maharashtra, UP, EWS Quota etc.
Why are we seeing this demand of reservation?
Your answer is in bits and pieces and it is lacking the necessary flow. This is more like start stop answer. Points are placed in haphazard manner.
Simple structure of the answer is:
Give instances of recent granting quota
Give constitutional Criteria for granting quota
discuss why there is a rise in such quota
suggest challenges due to this
Conclude suggesting some way forward.

Way forward is weak.

Marks: 2

avani k
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  avani k

Better answer than the last one.
Good intro.
After intro, do discuss some of the features of the proposed Automated Facial Recognition System and its intended application as mentioned by the National Crime Records Bureau.
Rest of the answer is fine.
Points like plastic surgery are quite general and avoid them

Marks: 4.5

Borne
1 year ago

Hi Team,

I have attached the images instead of links and will change to A4 sheet in my future answers. Please review these two questions. Thanks
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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Borne

Hi Mud Borne
Intro is totally misplaced.
Your 1st full page is discussing the background of the reservation but that is not the demand of he question
Avoid paragraph based presentation and even if you are using it then kindly use sub headings. It will be better in the mains answers.
This answer seems as if i am reading an essay or a report. You have discussed everything but the question.
Answer suffers from over explanation and over discussion.
Way forwards are good.
The demand of the question is simple:

In the intro give instances of recent granting quota
Give constitutional Criteria for granting quota
discuss why there is a rise in such quota
suggest challenges due to this
Conclude suggesting some way forward.

Marks: 1.5

Borne
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Borne

No need of these kinds of intro if you are not linking the topic of the question in it. There has to be some sort of linkage in the intro.
There are some good points in the answer but overall answer lacks depth and it ends abruptly.
Explain Automated Facial Recognition System.
Discuss some of the features of the proposed Automated Facial Recognition System and its intended application as mentioned by the National Crime Records Bureau.
Give positives of technology
Give negatives of it.
Conclude suggesting a way forward opting for a middle path.

That is the expected outcome from the answer but your answer veered away in the 2nd part of the answer and there was not much discussion after it.

Marks: 2

Parth Ranjan
1 year ago

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Parth Verma
Editor
1 year ago
Reply to  Parth Ranjan

Hi Parth
Very good answer.
But in between discussion on implications and intro, do mention the reasons for the rise in such quota.
Rest of the answer is handled decently and your coverage is depth.
Good language in the answer.
Decent way forwards.

Marks: 5.5

Murari Jha
1 year ago

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Murari Jha
1 year ago
Reply to  Murari Jha

sir please review it

Murari Jha
1 year ago
Reply to  Murari Jha

sir please review it

Murari Jha
1 year ago

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Murari Jha
1 year ago
Reply to  Murari Jha

sir please review it

Murari Jha
1 year ago
Reply to  Murari Jha

sir please review it