19th July 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement

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Question 1)

It is important to keep armed forces busy and well- mobilized to maintain them battle- ready, thus, their peace-time functions also have a strategic dimension. Elaborate.

Question 2)

India’s singular objective as a non-permanent member of the United Nations Security Council (UNSC) should be to help build a stable and secure external environment. Discuss.

Question 3)

What was the Kihoto Hollohan case? How does it hold importance in the context of recent events?

Question 4)

If evil or bad actions are the result of ignorance according to the virtue ethics, then why educated people get indulge in White Collar Crimes?

 

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Prakhar Bharadwaj
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Parth Verma
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Hi Prakhar
Decent answer.
You have covered all the necessary aspects of the question in structured manner.
Fair way forwards.

Marks: 6

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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Parth Verma
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Good content.
But do mention more inputs regarding “importance in the context of recent events.”
Apart from that discourse is decent and detailed.

Marks: 4.5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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Parth Verma
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More discussion is needed on the topic.
Your 1st part is good.
But you have to give more discussion on why educated people get indulge in White Collar Crimes.
Read the model answer for that

Marks: 3

Mohsin Khursheed
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Akhtar zamil
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good ..keep it mohsin bhai

Mohsin Khursheed
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Parth Verma
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Hi Mohsin
Avoid such lengthy intro paragraphs.
You misread the demand of the question.
It asked about the ” peace-time functions also have a strategic dimension.”
That means you have to discuss peace time tasks undertaken by the armed forces like games, rescue operations, R&D, natural disasters, intelligence gathering, securing civilian areas during insurgency or unrest, military exercises with other nation’s forces etc.
Read the model answer in this regard.

marks: 1

Mohsin Khursheed
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Mohsin Khursheed
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Parth Verma
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Avoid large paragraphs.
Answer is good.
Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
Explanation and language crisp and effective.
Keep writing like this.

Marks: 5

mud borne
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Please review 😀

mud borne
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Kindly ignore. I have posted individual answers again

project _osiris
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project _osiris
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sourav singh
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Murari Jha
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Not able to upload pdf or images . please look at this issue.
Payement id :- MOJO9708E00A65259027

Mohsin Khursheed
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Parth Verma
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Fair answer.
You have discussed all the necessary aspects of the question in structured manner.
Fair way forwards.
The answer is informative and detailed yet its crisp.

Marks: 6

avani k
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Parth Verma
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Hi Avani
You misread the demand of the question.
It asked about the ” peace-time functions also have a strategic dimension.”
That means you have to discuss peace time tasks undertaken by the armed forces like games, rescue operations, R&D, natural disasters, intelligence gathering, securing civilian areas during insurgency or unrest, military exercises with other nation’s forces etc.
Read the model answer in this regard.

Marks: 2

avani k
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Parth Verma
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You could discuss the conflict with details rather than writing as bullet points.
Good way forwards.
Direction of the answer is correct and you managed to break the answer into relevant sub headings.
keep writing.

Marks: 4.5

avani k
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Parth Verma
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The content and structure is quite good.
But presentation needs improvement
Answer has various start stop discussion and it looks fragmented.
Whatever you have discussed, discuss it in in more coherent manner with less use of arrows. Use proper sentences.

Marks: 4

Murari Jha
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Parth Verma
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Hi Murari
The first and second parts of the answer are decent in terms of discourse.
But you can curtail the discussion on the importance India’s membership in UNSC.
The gained space and time should be utilized to give more and better suggestions.
You can extra dimensions in way forwards like the climate change, global trading order, refugee crisis, rule based order etc.
read the model answer for that.
Marks: 4

Murari Jha
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Parth Verma
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Apart from missing conclusion, there is nothing wrong in the answer.
You have discussed all the angles with depth and good language.
The sub headings are very good and content nice.
The flow, presentation and way forwards are apt.
Keep writing like this.
Avoid cutting though.

Marks: 5.5

Shivangi Uliana
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Shivangi Uliana
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Parth Verma
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Hi Shivangi
Avoid lengthy paragraphs like you used in the the answer.
Answer is good.
Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
Explanation and language crisp and effective.
Avoid this kind of presentation.
Minus marks for that.
Marks: 4.5

Shivangi Uliana
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Shivangi Uliana
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Parth Verma
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You dont have to discuss the reasons for India being a member of UNSC.
That is not relevant in the answer.
You misjudged the demand of the question.
u were supposed to discuss the global challenges in the worl right now.
And how can India help solve them with the help of UNSC.
It was not about pros and cons of the USNC permanent membership for India.
The core demand was “How can India, as a non permanent member of UNSC, help build a stable and secure external environment.”
read the questions carefully.

Marks: .5

Shivangi Uliana
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Parth Verma
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Good intro.
Decent answer.
You have covered all the necessary aspects of the question in structured manner.
The language is good for ethics answer.
Nothing to pinpoint.

Marks: 5.5

mud borne
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Please Review
Q1

Parth Verma
Admin

Good direction.
But lack of content and depth makes the answer less effective.
That means you have to discuss more peace time tasks undertaken by the armed forces like rescue operations, intelligence gathering, securing civilian areas during insurgency or unrest, military exercises with other nation’s forces etc.
Read the model answer in this regard.
Marks: 3

mud borne
Member

Please Review
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Parth Verma
Admin

Answer lacks depth, discussion and right structure.
Mention what are the present global uncertainties and challenges are.
You can write points like global trading environment, trade wars, conflict in middle east, humanitarian crisis, rising anti-globalization scheme like BREXIT, Iran and North Korea issue, breaking of various cold war era treaties, environment protection, issue of climate change, terrorism, radicalization etc.
Then mention how can India help counter these issues.
read the model answer.

Marks: 2

mud borne
Member

Please review
Q3

Parth Verma
Admin

Answer lacks content and depth.
the presentation and structuring are poor as well.
You have to break down the demands of the question into small sub headings and discuss them.
Read the model answer in that regard.

Marks: 1.5

mud borne
Member

Please review
Q4

Parth Verma
Admin

You discussed the examples of Hansal Mehta, policeman and companies.
But you have to mention in terms of ethics why they do that?
the discussion has to be detailed and informative.
Avoid writing such short answers.

Marks: 2

pranab prakash
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Q1

Parth Verma
Admin

Hi Pranab
Very good answer.
You have covered almost all the important points.
The direction of the discourse is decent and on right track.

Marks: 6

pranab prakash
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Payment ID MOJO9611300N14575632
Q2

Parth Verma
Admin

Answer is good.
Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
Explanation and language crisp and effective.
Use subheadings for your discussion.
That will be a better way for enhancing your presentation.

marks: 6

pranab prakash
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Q3

Parth Verma
Admin

The answer lacks structure.
Discuss the issues and their way forwards separately.
Plus you need more content in the global issues like global trading environment, trade wars, conflict in middle east, humanitarian crisis, rising anti-globalization scheme like BREXIT, Iran and North Korea issue, breaking of various cold war era treaties, environment protection, issue of climate change, terrorism, radicalization etc.
Then give proper way forward in separate sub heading.

marks: 2.5

project _osiris
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Parth Verma
Admin

Hi Project Osiris
You misjudged the demand of the question.
u were supposed to discuss the global challenges in the worl right now.
And how can India help solve them with the help of UNSC.
It was not about pros and cons of the USNC permanent membership for India.
The core demand was “How can India, as a non permanent member of UNSC, help build a stable and secure external environment.”
In the first part you had to discuss global issues like global trading environment, trade wars, conflict in middle east, humanitarian crisis, rising anti-globalization scheme like BREXIT, Iran and North Korea issue, breaking of various cold war era treaties, environment protection, issue of climate change, terrorism, radicalization etc.
Then give proper way forward in separate sub heading as in what can India do with these issues.
read the questions carefully.

Marks: 1.5

project _osiris
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Parth Verma
Admin

The content and structure is OK.
But presentation needs lots of improvement
Answer has various start stop discussion and it looks fragmented.
Whatever you have discussed, discuss it in in more coherent manner.
Work on your presentation.

Marks: 2.5

Varsha Chauhan
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Parth Verma
Admin

Hi Varsha
Good intro.
Decent answer.
You have covered all the necessary aspects of the question in structured manner.
The language is good for ethics answer.
Nothing to pinpoint.

Marks: 6

Vishvjeet Holkar
Member

Q1

Parth Verma
Admin

Hi Vishvjeet
Very good answer.
Points are comprehensive, well placed and apt.
You have covered almost all the important points.
The direction of the discourse is decent and on right track.

Marks: 6

Vishvjeet Holkar
Member

Q2

Parth Verma
Admin

Good direction but 1st part lacks content.
You need more content in the global issues like global trading environment, trade wars, conflict in middle east, humanitarian crisis, rising anti-globalization scheme like BREXIT, Iran and North Korea issue, breaking of various cold war era treaties, environment protection, issue of climate change, terrorism, radicalization etc.
Way forwards are decent but better explanation is needed.

Marks: 3.5

Vishvjeet Holkar
Member

Q3

Parth Verma
Admin

Answer is decent.
Your discussion has all the elements and angles thats are necessary.
Explanation and language crisp and effective.
Presentation can be improved.
But the depth of the answer is excellent.

Marks: 5.5

ria chaudhary
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Parth Verma
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Hi Ria
Answer is good.
Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
Explanation and language crisp and effective.
Use subheadings for your discussion.
That will be a better way for enhancing your presentation.

Marks: 5

ria chaudhary
Member

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Parth Verma
Admin

Avoid over explanation.
Answer is good in terms of content and direction.
Your discussion has elements thats are necessary.
Sub heading are well placed.
Points have nice coverage and depth
Language is decent but points are somewhere over explained. Avoid this kind of explanation .
Minus marks for that.
Marks: 4.5