27th June 2019 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement

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Question 1)

Discuss the influence of East India Companies (British, French, Dutch and Portuguese) on the architecture of the Indian subcontinent from mid-17th century onwards. (250 W)

Question 2)

“The nation needs to find ways to contain growth of population without use of coercion.” Examine the statement in the light of UN’s World population prospects 2019 report. (250 words)

Question 3)

“Farmers have been struggling with inadequate returns on their produce, and it is due to various reasons; an important reason being the rising cost of inputs bringing down earning.” Can private investments in primary agriculture prove to be a solution to make agriculture more sustainable for the country? Discuss. (250 words)

Question 4)

“A world without nuclear weapons would be less stable and more dangerous for all of us.” Critically examine the ethical dimensions of the given statement from the perspective of international relations. (150 words)

 

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Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
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Hi Prakhar

Your overall discussion is fine.
To add weight to your answer, briefly mention what were the erstwhile populations control policies of GoI and why did they failed. Focus more should be on the role of coercion and putting female participation on the forefront in this coercion tactics.
Points discussed in the answer are decent and explanation crisp.
Good way forwards.
keep writing.

Marks: 5.5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
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Good intro.
While you tried to mention points regarding why farmers are not getting due returns, also mention points like Inefficient price signals; Limited reach of mandis; Too many intermediaries, information asymmetry; Backward and Forward Linkages Issues like Inadequate infrastructure for storage; Skewed distribution of capacity; Lack of cold storage infrastructure; Lack of collateral management options etc.

Also do not take a mini paragraph to explain your points in the bullet format. Mention the issue and just try to explain them in a couple of statements and move to the next bullet point. This way you can inculcate a lot of points in your answers.

The premise of the answer is based on the idea of pvt investment and yet you did not discussed the points with depth. For example how will farmers get assured return on produce or improve quality of produce with pvt investment? Write couple of statements regarding these points.

Points in the 2nd part are general and average with no depth. Read the model answer.
What is the way forward?
Read the model answer.

Marks: 2

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
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Give some more insights about the topic in the intro.
Your answer lacks enough discussion in the needed direction of the answer.
You touched the issue just from the above and ended it without elaborating the debate between moral dilemma of nuclear weapon and world peace.
The ideal approach would have been:

First part of the answer should bring out how the issue of nuclear weapons has its own moral dimensions.
Then one should examine the different ethical dimensions of the statement. They may be:
– Stability in world affairs v/s always living under fear.
– If Nuclear weapons in themselves are moral or immoral
– From the point of view of Utilitarianism and deontology.
– Money for weapons v/s money for poor and other developmental objectives

Read the model answer in this regard.

Marks: 1.5

pranab prakash
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Q1

parth verma
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Hi Pranab

Intro is decent but do mention in couple of statements as in what changes these colonizers brought with themselves which was missing in the earlier styles in India. It should not be a lengthy discussion, just a couple of statements.
Rest of the answer is near perfect with enough details and discussions and examples.
Language and presentation of the answer is really satisfactory,
Overall decent answer.

Marks: 6

pranab prakash
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Q2

parth verma
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Do not give all this details of global importance. Give due importance towards points related to India.
The key word of the question is: “contain growth of population without use of coercion.”
hence do not discuss the challenges of growing population with such great length. After discussing few points on the key findings of the report, again just briefly discuss the challenges of this population overgrowth and then give main focus on the part where you have to discuss the policies and programs adopted by the government why it failed (due to coercion tactics).
What is the way forward? You failed to mention them too because the er is clearly asking the “solutions which are not coercive. ”
Always try to focus your answers on the expected line of the question. Read them carefully and try not to be too generic with your approach.

Marks: 2

pranab prakash
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Q3

parth verma
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Good intro.
Do not take a mini paragraph to explain your points in the bullet format. Mention the issue and just try to explain them in a couple of statements and move to the next bullet point. This way you can inculcate a lot of points in your answers.

Also mention points like Inefficient price signals; Limited reach of mandis; Too many intermediaries, information asymmetry; Backward and Forward Linkages Issues like Inadequate infrastructure for storage; Skewed distribution of capacity; Lack of cold storage infrastructure; Lack of collateral management options etc.

Good 2nd part but do not over explain as mentioned above. You have to give maximum points possible. Write as many points as you know but write only 1-2 line about that point. It’s always better to cover more points than to write few points in detail.

Good conclusion.

Marks 3.5

Mohsin Khursheed
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parth verma
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Hi Mohsin

DO not write whole question on the answer sheet. Just mention the question number correctly and start writing answer.
Good use of flowchart and points are decent too.
Good answer overall.
Points are exhaustive and explanation decent.

Marks: 4.5

Parth Ranjan
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parth verma
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Hi Parth

First discuss the key findings of the report.

The key word of the question is: “contain growth of population without use of coercion.” hence do not discuss the challenges of growing population with such great length. Discuss it only briefly.

Give main focus on the part where you have to discuss the policies and programs adopted by the government why it failed (due to coercion tactics).

Good 2nd part of the answer and way forwards are decent. Read the questions carefully and try to stick to the demand of the question.

Marks: 3

Parth Ranjan
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parth verma
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Always try to link the main issue of the question (pvt investment in agriculture) in your intro.
Good points in the 1st part. You covered almost all the necessary points.
Both the parts are managed well here and discussion is short yet effective. Points are solid.
Decent coverage.

Marks: 5.5

Parth Ranjan
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parth verma
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Your answer has quite substantive points and conclusion was also good.
But you have written less points and focus on writing with wider coverage in ethics answers.
Both sides of the arguments are presented in real good manner but lack of points makes this an editorial kind of answer.
Read the model answer.

Marks: 4

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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Hi Utkarsh

Points are decent and well covered.
Overall discussion is ok and in the right manner.
Give some real life examples of nations and their nuclear powers and yet the problem they face.
Altogether good answer.

Marks: 4.5

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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Your 1st part is all inclusive and exhaustive.
The food thing with your answers is that it creates minimum fuss and yet covers and explains almost all the necessary elements of the question. Good work in the 1st part.
Better and more points are needed in the 2nd part where you discussed the role of pvt investment.
Points like Integrated cold chain solutions; Alternate marketplaces; Reducing the information asymmetry; Innovative ICT tools for supply chain management etc need to be mentioned in this part along with what you mentioned.
Good conclusion.

Marks: 3.5

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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First discuss the key findings of the report and do this not in intro. The discussion of this part should focus on points related on India only and discussion should be brief.

The key word of the question is: “contain growth of population without use of coercion.” hence do not discuss the challenges of growing population with such great length. After discussing few points on the key findings of the report, again just briefly discuss the challenges of this population overgrowth and then give main focus on the part where you have to discuss the policies and programs adopted by the government why it failed (due to coercion tactics).

Points in your way forwards are solid and exhaustive.
Decent conclusion.
Read the model answer for the part i have suggested improvement.

Marks: 3

sourav singh
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parth verma
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Hi Sourav. Please upload the answers on this page to get it reviewed. Thanks

Kunal Aggarwal
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parth verma
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Hi Kunal
Discussion would have been decent if the demand the question was “Debate around demographic dividend”. But the demand is that you have to discuss the key findings of the report first. then quite briefly discuss the challenges pose by this over population. Then comes the main part of the answer where you were supposed to discuss the issues with the earlier policies and programs of the governments and how their coercive nature failed them. hence your way forwards should also be on the same line: how not to use coercive tactics and yet handle this growing issue of population
Good conclusion.

Marks: 1.5

Kunal Aggarwal
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parth verma
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Like most of your answers, this is a well structured and discussed answer.
Coverage of the answer is solid and exhaustive .
Both the parts are covered in holistic manner and explained in solid manners.
Nothing wrong in the given answer.

Marks: 6.5

Kunal Aggarwal
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parth verma
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Good answer.
One more angle which you could have explored was “Money for weapons v/s money for poor and other developmental objectives”
Apart from that, really crisp discussion.

Marks: 5.5

Mohsin Khursheed
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parth verma
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Please try to upload in the portrait mode.
Lengthy intro. Divide it into 2 parts and discuss the findings of the report after intro.
One of the perhaps only answer where someone discussed the policies adopted by the governments in all these years!!! Keep it up.
In the discussion of why these policies failed, try to focus more on the part of coercion.
Good 2nd part. Points are exhaustive and solid.
All in all, good and decent attempt. Most of the students lost the track of the question and did not addressed the required and relevant points. You did it. Keep it up.

Marks: 5.5

Mohsin Khursheed
Member

Thankyou Sir…. i have a question regarding intros, i try to link the intro the the topic in question and mention the current status of the topic e.g child marriage, unemployment etc but in that process the intro is stretched how can i counter that?

Mohsin Khursheed
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parth verma
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Do not write lengthy paragraphs like you did in the concluding paragraph.
Try to focus on moral and ethical dilemmas of the nuclear weapon issue.
The ideal approach would have been:
-Stability in world affairs v/s always living under fear.
– If Nuclear weapons in themselves are moral or immoral
– From the point of view of Utilitarianism and deontology.
– Money for weapons v/s money for poor and other developmental objectives

You discussed some of these points but read the model answer for better understanding of the answer.

Marks: 3.5

noira khan
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parth verma
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Hi Noira
The pints provided in the answer are decent.
But to give weight to your answer, you have to also focus on the previous plans and strategies adopted by governments regarding population control and how coercion as a technique failed.
rest of the answer is fine.
Good inputs on steps needed to be taken.
Structure is solid and language smooth
Decent attempt.

Marks: 4.5

noira khan
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parth verma
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Join the 1st two paragraphs together to create an unified intro which will be more suitable to the demand of the question, in terms of content as well as structure.
The main body is quite balanced with discussion on both sides of the arguments.
Points discussed in the pvt investment’s angles from both sides are satisfactory and enough.
Good conclusion.
Overall, near perfect answer in all the departments.

Marks: 6.5

RAVI VERMA
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thanks

Varsha Chauhan
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parth verma
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Hi Varsha
All the parts of the answer are to attempted to the demand of the question.
Discussion entails all the necessary elements like ethics of nuclear weapon, monetary burden it creates, angles of Utilitarianism and Deontology.
Nothing to pin point in the answer.
Decent attempt once again.
Keep writing

Marks: 6

Varsha Chauhan
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parth verma
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Always try to link the main issue of the question (pvt investment in agriculture) in your intro. Briefly mention it so that you can tell the examiner what he/she should expect in the coming main body of the answer.

Good use of flowchart and points re decent. But you can extra important points like Limited reach of mandis; Too many intermediaries, information asymmetry; Backward and Forward Linkages Issues like Inadequate infrastructure for storage; Skewed distribution of capacity; Lack of cold storage infrastructure; Lack of collateral management options etc.

In questions regarding agri, these form the backbone of all your discussion so keep these points in mind.

Good answer from there on.
You have used the keywords, required for agri based answers, really well.
Decent last part.
Apart from the suggestions that i gave regarding extra inputs in the 1st part, test of the answer is pitch perfect and nothing should be done to alter it. Keep it up.

Marks: 4.5