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Introduce your answer with a brief write-up about the 19th century reforms movements.
In body first talk about briefly their socio-religious nature than elaborate how it affected the every aspect of Indian life.
Then write the limitations of the movements.
Conclude with arguments depicting effect of these movements on Indian freedom struggle.
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Naresh,
You have articulated your introduction and conclusion really well.
Structure is also fine.
How ever in core part i.e. impact on various aspects of life your way of expression and presentation needs to written better.
Here you have knowledge but need to mold your arguments as per the demand of the question.
Better to divide in subheadings like social, political, economic than using these examples to depict their impact.
Rest is good Keep writing 🙂
6.5
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Tanushree
You have written a fine introduction.
Covered all the aspects and arguments written are also diverse.
But you need to improve upon the arrangement of the arguments.
Here you need to club various argument dealing with one aspect say Social, at one place. This can be done by dividing your answer into subheadings.
It would give depth to your answer also will avoid juggling of various aspects.
Same can be done with limitations part
Conclusion written very well.
Keep writing:)
6.5
would try doing better in next answer. thankyou!
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Introduction is fine.
Structure of the answer is good.
You have covered all the aspects of the questions.
But you need to add more arguments under these header like revived faith in Indian religion, self respect, promotion of nationalism, idea of humanism and rationality etc. Also talk about the economic effects.
In limitations you can add indirectly aid to religious orthodoxy, too much focus on religious ideals, etc.
Conclusion is written fine but can be written better.
Keep writing 🙂
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Shubhashree,
Your introduction is good but it’s very lengthy. Intro should be directly attached to the question also should not take more than one paragraph.
You have given least space to the most important aspect of the question that is impact on various aspects of the life and you have discussed only one aspect that is Social.
Create subdivisions and discuss areas like Political, economy etc. As well.
Limitations written fine but these reforms movements gave rise to some orthodoxy but we can’t call it communalism which was the effect of British policy.
Arguments that you have written in conclusion must form Part of core aspect of the answer.
You must focus on diversifying you arguments, Their arrangements. Also improve structuring of the answer.
You have enough knowledge. Keep writing you’ll improve:)
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Utkarsha,
It’s not necessary for getting good marks you have to write dramatic introduction.
It’s fine you want to start your answer with quotes but try to make it in more relatable.
Going by the answer I can that you have enough knowledge.
But structure of the answer is very poor, lack logical sequence.
You needed to give more focus on core demand i.e. ‘impacts on various aspects of India life. And rather than writing separately you could have used ‘nature and examples” parts within core aspect of the answer.
In limitations you need to avoid points like Vivekanand seeking pride in ancient India, there is nothing wrong in it.
Also Conclusion needed to be written in positive light as SR movements are one of the most glorious part of modern Indian History.
Work on issues pointed out and keep writing. You’ll improve with time.
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Sakshi ,
You have started your answer really good. Going the right direction but you lost the track in the middle.
Various Aspect of Indian life means social, political, economic etc.
So you needed to address these area using your factual knowledge.
In limitations section also you need to add more points urban in nature, too much emphasis on religion, religious orthodoxy.
Medieval age as ‘dark age’ concept Started by British, also avoid points like Back to Vedas as it was used for reform by Swami Dayanand.
Conclusions can be written much better.
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Gaurishankar ,
Your introduction is Good.
You have covered all the aspects of the question, also structure is good.
In main body you could have used ideas Written in genesis of awakening so to avoid repetition.
Also to cover impact on various aspects of life you could have used broad Headings like social, Political and economic. It would give your answer Diversity and proper arrangement of argument.
You can add few more points under limitations.
Conclusion is fine.
Overall it’s a good Attempt. Keep writing 😉
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Anupam,
Your introduction is fine. But it’s too lengthy. Intro should not be longer then one paragraph.
There is repetition in your answer. You Must avoid that. Also you have focused too much on just social aspect. You need to diversify and explicitly depict effects in Fields like economic, political and other areas.
You need to add more points in limitations like rise to religion orthodoxy, too much emphasis on religion etc.
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Sana,
your introduction is very lengthy. Introduction Should not be longer than a paragraph.
Since this question is not about the nature or type of SR moments you could have avoided the entire discussion of first page just giving a passing reference would be enough.
In main part of the answer you have given too much focus on the social impact of the movements, need to diversify it into areas like economic, political etc.
You can add few more points into limitations.
Introduction is good but again it’s too long.
You have enough knowledge just arrangement and priority of the arguments as per the demand of the question need to keep in mind.
Keep writing 😉
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Ankita,
Introduction is fine but long try to concise it.
You have fine knowledge but arrangement and priority of the arguments need improvement.
In main body part you have to depict impact on various aspects of life. Here you have focused only on social aspect. You need to write economic and political aspects as well. Here you could have used ‘influence on freedom struggle’ part together in this section rather then writing separately.
You need to write more limitations.
Conclusion is fine.
You have enough knowledge. But you need to work upon the structure. Give points proper hierarchical priority to the points.
Keep writing:)
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You have written a very good answer.
Structure, expression and arrangement of arguments is also Good.
You can club women emancipation with social aspect and add more arguments especially in economic and political section.
Overall a fine Attempt. Keep writing in the same style 🙂
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Vivek,
Your introduction is good.
You have covered all the aspects of the question how ever there are few Issues.
1. You must improve structure of the que. Write short paragraphs, proper spacing between them.
2. In core part of the answer You have covered only social and cultural aspects in your answer, expand it into other aspects like political, economic etc.
3. More limitations can be written.
Try to give broadest possible coverage in your answer.
Read others’ answer as well keep writing;)
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Arpit,
Introduction is well articulated
Answer has covered all the aspects of the questions.
There is nothing much to suggest still two things I want to highlight, first for every question there is a kind natural order in which various parts must be written. So rather than writing other aspects you should have written social and cultural aspect first.
Second you didn’t used even a single example in your answer with which it’s incomplete.
Follow the principal that argument must be substantiated by an example.
Otherwise it’s a good Attempt keep writing:)
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Rahul,
Introduction is very lengthy, you cannot devote more than a half page for introduction. It should be just of one paragraph covering 3-4 lines. After that write 2-3 lines of connecting paragraph them jump to address core demand.
You have good factual knowledge but you have failed to understand the question.
It doesn’t demand you to write what various Samaj/movements did. Rather it want you to write impact of SR movement on various aspects of Indian life that is Social, religious, political, economic etc.
Conclusion is good.
You need to be more analytical in approach. Read question properly understand it’s demands, than mold your arguments with the help of factual knowledge as per the demand.
Read others’ answer. Keep writing:)
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Harshaa,
Introduction is fine but too long. Concise it into one
Your factual knowledge is good but you need to do more analysis.
You understood the question but didn’t justified it demands.
You have written only 1 line for the core demand (the impacts of SR movements) of the question.
My words may seem harsh to you but take this exercise more seriously.
Have confidence in your knowledge. I believe you can write good answers but you need to work hard for it.
Read questions, take help from Mentor’s Comments, take your time understand the demand, frame answer in mind then write.
Read others’ answer for better understanding, keep writing:)
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Ibrahim,
Your introduction is too lengthy you need to concise it. Introduction must not be more than one paragraph.
You have failed to understand the demand of the Question. It wanted you to depict the impact of SR movements on various aspects of Indian life like social, religious, political, economic etc. you have g focused only on social aspect diversify it.
Both points refers to the same in limitation need to add here points like indirectly gave rise to religious orthodoxy, too much focus on religious Outlook, etc.
Conclusion is fine.
Read the Question properly and mold your arguments as per the demand of the question.
Read others’ answers as well. Keep writing:)
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Rajlaxmi,
Your introduction is fine, Conclusion is very well articulated.
It seems you failed to understand the demand of the question.
Under header every aspect of life you have Written only social. Need to depict their impact on other aspects like economic, Political as well.
You have give unnecessary space to describe various movements which is not needed rather use them as examples to justify you points in impact section.
In Limitations portion can add more points like too much emphasis on religion, promoted religious orthodoxy etc.
You have enough knowledge just Read question properly.
Keep writing 😉
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Shivanshu,
Your introduction is fine. You have covered all the aspects of the questions very well.
Add points like Religious reforms, promotion of spirit of nationalism etc. Also add more examples in the answer.
Rest is good.
Overall a fine Attempt. Keep it up.
7.5/15
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Deepika,
Your introduction is fine.
Going by the Details of various movements that you have written, you have good factual knowledge.
But failed to understand what question is Actually asking.
Rather then elaborating various movements you had to write what was their impact in various aspects of Indian life that is Social, religious, political, economic aspects.
Limitations also written very few add more points here like limited reach to the masses, urban based, too much emphasis on religion, etc.
Conclusion is missing from the answer. Always conclude your answer.
Read question properly, understand demand then write answers.
Read others’ answers for better understanding of this question.
Keep writing:)
Plz review sir..i could not join the awe batch due to some problems from next month i will join it
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Kartikeya,
You have understood the question also have covered all the aspects.
Introduction is fine, Conclusion can be written better.
You still can improve your presentation, give proper space between various section of your answer.
Rest is good, very well Written.
Keep it up:)
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You have written a good introduction but it’s lengthy. Same is the case with the conclusion.
Try to concise.
In body you have covered all the aspects of the questions.
In impact section for better presentation you can divide your answer under headers like Political, social, economic ( you have missed this aspect).
Try to keep word limit in the mind otherwise it’ll took a toll on other questions.
Rest is fine. Overall a good Attempt.
Keep writing:)
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Aabha,
You have written a very lengthy introduction, try to concise it.
You could not justify the demand of the question satisfactorily.
Core demand of the question is depict the impact of movements on various aspects of Indian life i.e. social, religious, political, economic etc.
You have just covered only a small part of social impact i.e. emancipation of women.
You have unnecessarily written various movements.
Limitations are written fine.
Conclusion can be written well.
Read question properly, try to understand the demand take help of Mentor’s Comments if necessary.
Read others’ answers. Keep writing 🙂
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Rohan
Your introduction and conclusion are Good.
You have good command over language and expression. Structure is also fine
In body try to use broad headings like social political etc. It would make your answer broad and will help you to avoid repetition like points 1,2 &7 which refers to same idea. Also will make discussion more diverse. You have given too much focus on social aspect need to include economic, Political aspect as well.
Limitations portion written fine.
Overall you’ve written a fine answer, just to make discussion as broad as the scope of the question.
Keep writing:)
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Shubham
You have written fine introduction and conclusion. But your intro covered whole first page rather it should not take more than one paragraph.
You have very good factual knowledge. But you need to write what is asked in the question not What you know.
Question demands to depict impact of SR movements on various aspects of life like social, Political, economic etc, not what various movements did.
So mold your as per the demand of the question.
In limitations you can add more points like too much emphasis on religion, ideas were incomprehensible for the masses etc
Try to understand the demand of the question and mold your argument as per that demand.
Read others’ answers as well.
Keep writing 🙂
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Rupesh;
Your introduction and conclusion are written fine.
Structure is also fine. But you failed in understanding the demand of the question.
You have good factual knowledge but you need to write what is asked in the question not what you know.
Question demands to depict the impact of SR movements on the various aspects of the life i.e. social, Political etc. Not what various movements followed.
So mold your arguments as per the demand of the questions.
In limitations section also all points you written are the reasons behind one big limitation i.e. ‘lack of mass Support’ they are not limitations in themselves.
Here add points like limited to upper middle classes, urban areas, too much emphasis on religious aspects and neglected science technology etc.
Read the question properly, understand the demand, focus on analysis then just facts.
Read others answers for better understanding.
Keep writing 🙂
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Vishnu
Your introduction and conclusion are fine.
But you failed in addressing the demand of the question.
In main body you had to depict the impact of SR movements on various aspects of Indian life i.e. social, Political, economic etc.
Your focused remained only on social aspect.
To bring Diversity and objectivity in limited space you must essay style answers in Mains.
In Limitations also more points can be added.
Try to stick to demand of the question for this read question properly.
Read others answers for better understanding.
Keep practicing:)
Try to write answer on the same to avoid delay in evaluation future.