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Question 1)

There is a need to move away from disaster management to disaster risk management which requires us to pursue all developmental activity in a manner that lead to reduction of disaster risk. Discuss. (250 Words)

Question 2)

A $5 trillion economy target appears daunting. Yet It may yet be doable, provided policymakers begin with a realistic assessment. In this context discuss what is hampering India’s growth. What steps can be taken to overcome these challenges?

Question 3)

While Global warming’s ecological impacts are visible, economic impacts are still not fully explored. Discuss consequences of global warming in this context with special focus on developing countries. (250 Words)

Question 4)

Why is obedience important in an administrative hierarchy? Is it always important to obey the superiors? Mention some conditions in which obedience act as virtue and others in which it becomes a vice. (150 Words)

 

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Vishvjeet Holkar
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parth verma
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Hi Vishvjeet
Intro started decently but it looks incomplete because of no end to the statement.
The presentation and structure of the answer is poor.
It is not clear whether answer is talking about effects of disasters or the need for disaster risk management.
Way forwards are better.
Why disaster risk management is better than disaster management?
What is the present status of DRM in India? What makes it less attractive than DM?
Give some examples like Cyclone Phailin where DRM reduced the impact of the cyclone.
This should have been the approach of the answer in the 1st part.
Work on your presentation and use of language. It has to be informative as well fluid.

Marks: 1.5

Vishvjeet Holkar
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M0J09628G00A81713898

parth verma
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Good intro and 1st part of your answer.
You have tried to discuss maximum points in the 1st part where you discussed the issues with Indian economy. Do add other important points though like rural distress, impact on commodity exports, lack of demand in domestic markets, slowdown in MSMEs sector, global surge in protectionism etc.
Similarly you tried to cover points in 2nd part but missed on some important stuffs like support to agrarian sector, bank credit revival, work on labour intensive industries, labour laws relaxations, health care reforms, infrastructure development etc.
Points in your are exhaustive but try to explain them a little bit to make your answer more educative as well as presentable. Otherwise if you want to just write the points and do not want to explain them then use flowchart. Thats better way of structuring and presenting your answers.

Marks: 3.5

Vishvjeet Holkar
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M0J09628G00A81713898

parth verma
Admin

Much better answer in terms of discussion and explanation.
Your points are exhaustive and well covered.
Structure is decent though you can use separate sub headings to showcase effects of climate change on (a) India and (b) Rest of the World.
Main body of the answer is good.
But discuss way forwards separately from your conclusion. These kind of discussions should be done with more explanation.
Overall decent effort.
Work on your presentation and hand writing.

Marks: 4

Vishvjeet Holkar
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parth verma
Admin

Quite weak presentation and structure of the answer.
This looked like as if its a transcript of a casual talk on the issue.
It has to be well structured. Work on your language skills.
Your direction of the answer is on right track but it lacks proper content, crisp explanation and smooth structure.
Read the model answers please in this regard.

Marks: 1.5

Mohsin Khursheed
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parth verma
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Hi Mohsin
Quite a decent answer.
Your points, both in 1st and 2nd parts are quite good.
The subheadings are self explanatory and well explained too.
You have touched almost all the dimensions of the issue but there is an issue with that. This hampered your presentation a bit. Dont make your answer look like you have tried to scramble every point. Put them in such a manner that they look smooth. For that you can also use flowcharts in certain places to make it look better.
Apart from that, there is nothing to pinpoint or improve in your answer.
Well done.

Marks: 6.5

Mohsin Khursheed
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parth verma
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The question is on the issue of recent report named “Working on a warmer planet: The impact of heat stress on labour productivity and decent work”. therefore it is imperative that you mention it in your answer.
Answer will revolve around the issues talked in the report, specifically for India where it pegged economic losses and unemployment due to climate change.
Your answer has some decent points and once again their sub headings are quite good.
Excellent way forwards.

Marks: 4.5

Mohsin Khursheed
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parth verma
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Decent answer.
All the points are covered in holistic manner.
language, structure and presentation; all are good.
Relevant and good examples.
Keep it up.

Marks: 5.5

vinod bansal
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parth verma
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Hi Vinod
Your answer started really well but it lost traction after the 1st part.
Your way forwards are not suited to the demand of the question. They are exhaustive and you have put in a lot of hardwork in putting them and that was an alternative way but sadly it is not suitable in the current scenario. Read the model answer in this regard.
You have to provide points on these lines:
Why disaster risk management is better than disaster management?
What is the present status of DRM in India? What makes it less attractive than DM?
Give some examples like Cyclone Phailin where DRM reduced the impact of the cyclone.
What should be done by India wrt DRM?
This should have been the approach of the answer in the 2nd part.

Marks: 2.5

vinod bansal
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parth verma
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Good intro and 1st part of your answer.
You have tried to discuss maximum points in the 1st part where you discussed the issues with Indian economy. Do add other important points though like rural distress, impact on commodity exports, lack of demand in domestic markets, slowdown in MSMEs sector, global surge in protectionism etc.
Similarly you tried to cover points in 2nd part but missed on some important stuffs like support to agrarian sector, bank credit revival, work on labour intensive industries, health care reforms, infrastructure development etc.
Points in your are exhaustive.
Structure is decent.

Marks: 5.5

vinod bansal
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parth verma
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Answer lacks presentation and structure this time.
You again tried to discuss various points but there was no coherence.
Simply discuss the economic impacts as mentioned in the report.
You have to discuss this for both India as well as rest of the World. So divide the topic into two subheadings and explain them.
Read the model answer.
Your points are lengthy and paragraph too large. It is suited in essay answers but not in GS answers. It has to be small and effective. Otherwise use bullet points.
Way forwards needs to be discussed separately rather than as a concluding paragraph.
Marks: 3.5

vinod bansal
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parth verma
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Much better answer.
Content, its discussion, its presentation and its structure; all are well placed and covered.
In the 1st part, give more examples.

Marks: 4.5

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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Hi Utkasrh
Your answer is well balanced and quite informative.
You have covered almost all the dimensions of the topic but there are couple of suggestions.
1st: Define disaster risk management in the intro and mention how it is different than disaster management.
2nd: What is the present status of DRM in India? What makes it less attractive than DM?
Include these two angles in your answer to make it pitch perfect.
Explanation of the answer is superb.
Keep writing like this.

Marks: 5.5

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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Points are comprehensive and you have covered almost all the issues faced by the Indian economy.
Good intro and 1st part of your answer.
Do add other important points though like global surge in protectionism and weak global demand etc.
Similarly you tried to cover points in 2nd part but missed on some important stuffs like labour intensive industries, health care reforms, infrastructure development etc.
Overall good explanation and language is decent.
Structure is satisfactory.

Marks: 5.5

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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Answer seems to discuss the effect of ecological impact due to climate change, specially in the 1st part.
Instead your major focus should have been on the issue of economic impact like:
loss of 34 million job; heat stress on labour productivity; global productivity losses equivalent to 80 million full-time jobs in 2030; loss of the most working hours in southern Asia, the agrarian sector will be responsible for 60 per cent of global working hours lost from heat stress, by 2030; more and more working hours are expected to be lost in the construction sector etc.
Better 2nd part of the answer.
Way forwards are suited to the demand of the topic.

Marks: 3

Utkarsh Saxena
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parth verma
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Quite a good discussion.
the explanation was crisp and the flow of the answer was smooth.
Content, its discussion, its presentation and its structure; all are well placed and covered.
More examples could have been given.

Marks: 4.5

sourav singh
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parth verma
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Hi Sourav
Please upload the answers here to get them reviews as we dont have access to your files. Thanks

Mahesh
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parth verma
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Hi Mahesh
Very good answer.
You have discussed all the pertinent issues involved in the question in decent manner.
Explanation in both parts are crisp and effective.
Good balance.
There is nothing to pinpoint or improve in the answer in terms of content and structure,
But do work on your presentation skills. Use larger fonts. You are not over explaining your points hence you can improve your writing.

Marks: 5.5

Mahesh
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Payment ID
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parth verma
Admin

Your answer is well balanced and quite informative.
You have covered almost all the dimensions of the topic but there are couple of suggestions.
What is the present status of DRM in India?
What makes it less attractive than DM?
Include these two angles in your answer to make it pitch perfect.
Explanation of the answer is superb.
Keep writing like this.

Marks: 5.5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
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Hi Prakhar
Your idea and the approach towards answer is decent but the execution needs more work.
For example your intro has multiple examples but not a linkage to the DRM.
Instead, simply give one example and link it to the DRM in the same para. That will give your content better credence.
Do not take so much time and space to get t the point of the question.
In the first part, you have to discuss the following sub headings:
Why disaster risk management is better than disaster management?
What is the present status of DRM in India?
What makes it less attractive than DM?
Secondly, avoid this essay type discussion in GS mains answers because you will lose the focus from the issue of the question more often than not. Using sub headings and bullet points keep you in the loop.
The second part of the answer is much better approached and content is good.
Good use of flowchart.

Marks: 3.5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
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Good intro and 1st part of your answer.

You have tried to discuss maximum points in the 1st part where you discussed the issues with Indian economy. Do add other important points though like rural distress, impact on commodity exports, lack of demand in domestic markets, slowdown in MSMEs sector etc.
Similarly you tried to cover points in 2nd part but missed on some important stuffs like support to agrarian sector, bank credit revival, work on labour intensive industries, labour laws relaxations, health care reforms, infrastructure development etc.
Points in your answers are exhaustive
They are well explained and language is decent.
Overall decent attempt.

Marks: 5.5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
Admin

Good answer overall.
But you need to have little bit discussion on the economic effects on India as well. It should not be elaborative; just a brief discussion will do.
Structure and presentation are superb.
Points are well explained and comprehensive.
Good use of subheadings.

Marks: 5

Prakhar Bharadwaj
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parth verma
Admin

Content needs more depth and width.
I mean you have to explain your points more deeply than the way it has been done in the answer.
In the two main areas of the answer, where you have to discuss the two sides of obedience, your examples are weak and content small. Give more focus there. Give more relevant examples.
Conclusion is done decently and discussion is well placed there.

Marks: 2

noira khan
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parth verma
Admin

Hi Noira
You have covered almost all the dimensions of the topic but there are couple of suggestions.
What is the present status of DRM in India? What makes it less attractive than DM?
Include these two angles in your answer to make it pitch perfect.
Your answer is well balanced and quite informative.
Explanation of the answer is superb.
Approach in the way forward is good.
Keep writing like this.

Marks: 5.5

noira khan
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parth verma
Admin

Good intro and 1st part of your answer.
You have tried to discuss maximum points in the 1st part where you discussed the issues with Indian economy. Do add other important points though like rural distress, impact on commodity exports, lack of demand in domestic markets, slowdown in MSMEs sector, global surge in protectionism etc.
Similarly you tried to cover points in 2nd part but missed on some important stuffs like support to agrarian sector, bank credit revival, work on labour intensive industries, health care reforms, infrastructure development etc.
Points in your are exhaustive.
Structure is decent.
Admirable attempt Noira.

Marks: 5.5

noira khan
Member

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parth verma
Admin

While your main body and intro are splendid with their discussion, your conclusion and way forwards need better structure and discussion.
Points in the main answer are exhaustive, have various dimensions and well suited for the demand of the question.
But you have to discuss the way forwards just like you have done in previous answers. It has to be a different part than your concluding paragraph.

Marks: 4.5

pranab prakash
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Payment ID MOJO9611300N14575632
Q1

parth verma
Admin

Hi Pranab
Very good answer.
You have discussed all the pertinent issues involved in the question in decent manner.
Explanation in both parts are crisp and effective.
1st part is handled really well.
Good balance.
There is nothing to pinpoint or improve in the answer in terms of content and structure

Marks: 6

pranab prakash
Member

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Q2

parth verma
Admin

Good intro and 1st part of your answer.
You have tried to discuss maximum points in the 1st part where you discussed the issues with Indian economy. Do add other important points though like rural distress, impact on commodity exports, lack of demand in domestic markets, slowdown in MSMEs sector, global surge in protectionism etc.
Similarly you tried to cover points in 2nd part but missed on some important stuffs like support to agrarian sector, bank credit revival, work on labour intensive industries, health care reforms, infrastructure development etc.
Points in your are exhaustive.
No conclusion.
Answer ends abruptly. Avoid this habit.

Marks: 4.5

pranab prakash
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Q3

parth verma
Admin

In the intro, do mention the report’s name on which the whole premise of the question is based. It was in news recently. These little things will go a long way in improving your marks.
Points in the 1st part needs better content and should revolve around the findings of that report like loss of 34 million job; heat stress on labour productivity; global productivity losses equivalent to 80 million full-time jobs in 2030; loss of the most working hours in southern Asia, the agrarian sector will be responsible for 60 per cent of global working hours lost from heat stress, by 2030; more and more working hours are expected to be lost in the construction sector etc.
Better 2nd part of the answer.
Way forwards are suited to the demand of the topic.
Again no conclusion and answer ends abruptly.

Marks: 3.5

Varsha Chauhan
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parth verma
Admin

Hi Varsha
Give some examples like Cyclone Phailin where DRM reduced the impact of the cyclone.
Quite a decent answer.
Your points, both in 1st and 2nd parts are quite good.
The subheadings are self explanatory and well explained too.
You have touched almost all the dimensions of the issue but there is an issue with that. This hampered your presentation a bit. Dont make your answer look like you have tried to scramble every point. Put them in such a manner that they look smooth. For that you can also use flowcharts in certain places to make it look better.

Marks: 6

Varsha Chauhan
Member

Q3 MOJO9611C00A14581096

parth verma
Admin

Good answer overall.
But you need to have little bit discussion on the economic effects on India as well. It should not be elaborative; just a brief discussion will do.
Structure and presentation are superb.
Points are well explained and comprehensive.
Good use of subheadings.

Marks: 5.5

Varsha Chauhan
Member

Hi sir, i have a request, if that’s worth considering could you please post a case study question in GS 4 once or twice a week so that we can get your views on our case study approach too and subsequently work on it. I’ m sure you might have planned it for a later stage but I have taken a leave from work for 15 days and might not be able to write as diligently in the coming months before mains so just thought of making the most of this time. Thanks
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parth verma
Admin

Sure Varsha. We had planned it for subsequent months but we can sure pre-pone it. Thanks

Varsha Chauhan
Member

Great! Thanks 🙂

parth verma
Admin

Good start to your answer.
Overall quite a good discussion.
The explanation was crisp and the flow of the answer was smooth.
Content, its discussion, its presentation and its structure; all are well placed and covered.
More examples could have been given though.

Marks: 4

Parth Ranjan
Member

Q1
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parth verma
Admin

Hi Parth
Good use of flowchart.
But intro needs more refining.
Your answer is well balanced and quite informative.
You have covered almost all the dimensions of the topic but there are couple of suggestions.
1st: Define disaster risk management in the intro and mention how it is different than disaster management.
2nd: What is the present status of DRM in India?
What makes it less attractive than DM?
Include these two angles in your answer to make it pitch perfect.
Explanation of the answer is superb.

Marks: 5

Parth Ranjan
Member

Q3
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parth verma
Admin

Your starting and the 1st part of the main body are addressed superbly.
Content is well placed, well structured and well explained.
Points are comprehensive and good.
But your way forwards need more work.
Just before way forward, mention, what has India done so far wrt mitigating climate change.
And in your way forwards, more points are needed.

Marks: 4

Chandan Kumar
Member

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Q1

parth verma
Admin

Hi Chandan
Good intro.
Good discussion in 1st part but more dimensions are needed to be discussed here before moving onto the 2nd part.
Why disaster risk management is better than disaster management?
What is the present status of DRM in India?
What makes it less attractive than DM?
Give some examples like Cyclone Phailin where DRM reduced the impact of the cyclone.
This should have been the approach of the answer in the 1st part.
Very good 2nd part. Points are comprehensive.
Nice conclusion.

Marks: 3.5

Chandan Kumar
Member

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Q2

parth verma
Admin

Better intro is needed.
Points in the 1st part are not at all comprehensive. This is a very huge and popular topic of discussion hence there are plethora of points to be discussed like rural distress, impact on commodity exports, lack of demand in domestic markets, slowdown in MSMEs sector, global surge in protectionism etc.
Points like Rupee to Dollar exchange rate has no standing in this answer. Avoid such general statements.

Similarly you tried to cover points in 2nd part but missed on some important stuffs like support to agrarian sector, bank credit revival, work on labour intensive industries, labour laws relaxations, health care reforms, infrastructure development etc.

Points in your are exhaustive but try to explain them a little bit to make your answer more educative as well as presentable. Otherwise if you want to just write the points and do not want to explain them then use flowchart. Thats better way of structuring and presenting your answers.

Marks: 3

Chandan Kumar
Member

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Q3

parth verma
Admin

The question is on the issue of recent report named “Working on a warmer planet: The impact of heat stress on labour productivity and decent work”. therefore it is imperative that you mention it in your answer.
Answer will revolve around the issues talked in the report, specifically for India where it pegged economic losses and unemployment due to climate change.
Your major focus should have been on the issue of economic impact like:
loss of 34 million job; heat stress on labour productivity; global productivity losses equivalent to 80 million full-time jobs in 2030; loss of the most working hours in southern Asia, the agrarian sector will be responsible for 60 per cent of global working hours lost from heat stress, by 2030; more and more working hours are expected to be lost in the construction sector etc.
Just before way forward, mention, what has India done so far wrt mitigating climate change.
Good way forwards and conclusion.

Marks: 3

Chandan Kumar
Member

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Q4

parth verma
Admin

You can add points in the discussion on importance of Obedience:
obligation to pursue the public interest,
(b) obligation to pursue administrative procedures and processes, and
(c) obligation to colleagues to enhance standards of excellence.
Spelling of obedience is wrong in your answer! Avoid such mistakes.
Discussion in the 2nd part is lackluster and needs better content and discussion.
You havent provided any examples to support your points.
They are the vital cog of ethic answers.
Never avoid them

Marks: 2..5

avani k
Member

Q2

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Hi Avani

Good intro and 1st part of your answer.
You have tried to discuss maximum points in the 1st part where you discussed the issues with Indian economy. Do add other important points though like rural distress, impact on commodity exports, lack of demand in domestic markets, global surge in protectionism etc.
Similarly you tried to cover points in 2nd part but missed on some important stuffs like support to agrarian sector, bank credit revival, work on labour intensive industries, labour laws relaxations, health care reforms, infrastructure development etc.
Good use of flowchart.
Overall quite a decent attempt.

Marks: 5

avani k
Member

Q3
Respected Sir, I understand I am late for this answer. Hope you will review it. Thank you!

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parth verma
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You have discussed a lot of points but most of them are misplaced.
The question is on the issue of recent report named “Working on a warmer planet: The impact of heat stress on labour productivity and decent work”. therefore it is imperative that you mention it in your answer.
Your major focus should have been on the issue of economic impact like:
loss of 34 million job; heat stress on labour productivity; global productivity losses equivalent to 80 million full-time jobs in 2030; loss of the most working hours in southern Asia, the agrarian sector will be responsible for 60 per cent of global working hours lost from heat stress, by 2030; more and more working hours are expected to be lost in the construction sector etc.
Also briefly discuss the issue of climate change on Indian economy. This discussion should be just brief.
Better way forwards are needed.

Marks: 3