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- In the intro write the definition of secularism.
- In the body, mention India’s constitutions approach towards secularism, religious freedom as fundamental rights, secularism as the basic feature. In the next part compare approach of India’s secularism which is always not separate from the religion as in the case of Western secularism.
- Conclude by mentioning how India’s approach has helped it harmonising the various religions in the country as well as correct some evils.
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Hi Taran
Lackluster introduction, work on sentence formation, you can write- Secularism means separation of religion from political, economic, social and cultural aspects of life, religion being treated as a purely personal matter.
Along with mentioning Articles , write the idea of secularism in India, you can write points like unlike some secularism, ours is not blindly anti-religious but respects religion. Unlike the secularism of pre-dominantly single religious societies, it respects not one but all religions.
Try to give your own view point, mentioning only Articles in not enough.
First write the point then give examples, only examples will not work, you can write that in Indian secularism, state shall interfere in religion so as to remove evils in it. Then give examples of triple talaq.
Follow a proper structure to get better marks.
Conclude by mentioning how India’s approach has helped it harmonising the various religions in the country as well as correct some evils.
Work on content.
Avoid grammatical errors.
Work hard,you will improve.
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@Parth Verma Sir, please review.
Hi Shubham
Good introduction but need to summarise it.
Try to write short and crisp introduction.
Along with mentioning Articles , write the idea of secularism in India, you can write points like unlike some secularism, ours is not blindly anti-religious but respects religion. Unlike the secularism of pre-dominantly single religious societies, it respects not one but all religions.
Try to give your own view point, mentioning only Articles in not enough.
You have compared both the secularism in a decent manner.
Good conclusion but again need to summarise it.
Avoid grammatical errors.
Keep working hard !
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Hi Dakshina
Lackluster introduction, write the definition of secularism.
You have explained the India’s idea of secularism in a decent manner but mention some Articles also.
Lack of content in the comparison part,write points like in the western model, State does not intervene in the affairs of religion till the time religion is working within the limits of the law.
On the other hand, in Indian secularism, state shall interfere in religion so as to remove evils in it.
Try to diversify your content for better marks.
Lackluster conclusion, conclude by mentioning how India’s approach has helped it harmonising the various religions in the country as well as correct some evils.
Work on content.
Work on sentence formation.
Keep writing !
Please review
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@Parth verma
Hi Divya
Try to scan without the shadow.
Good introduction but need to rephrase it.
You have directly compared both the secularism, first write about the idea of Indian secularism, mention some Articles.
Plan the structure before writing.
Avoid using unnecessary capital alphabets in between of a sentence, work on grammar.
Lackluster conclusion, conclude by mentioning how India’s approach has helped it harmonising the various religions in the country as well as correct some evils.
Work on content.
Try to cover different dimensions to fetch better marks.
Do not get demotivated by the marks, keep writing, you will improve.