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- https://indianexpress.com/
article/opinion/columns/ rajasthan-political-crisis- parliamentary-system-shashi- tharoor-6522100/ - In the intro, mention the India system of parliamentary government.
- In the body, compare the two systems on the various basis-election, drawing of executive, quality of executives, the responsibility to the house, law-making process, the election of the president vs. prime minister etc. In the issues in India, you can mention the instability of governments, defections of representatives, lack of talent pool in executive, less debate on the legislative matters etc.
- Conclude by mention the need to revisit the system of government in India.
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Hi Deepika
Good introduction.
You have compared both the systems in a comprehensive manner.
You have written good points in the issues part, but giving you some more points-
-No separation of powers- Since there is no genuine separation of powers, the legislature cannot always hold the executive responsible.
-Failure to take a prompt decision- Because there is no fixed tenure enjoyed by the Council of Ministers, it often hesitates from taking bold and long-term policy decisions.
-Party politics: Party politics is more evident in the parliamentary system where partisan interests drive politicians more than national interests.
-Control by the bureaucracy: Civil servants exercise a lot of power. They advise the ministers on various matters and are also not responsible to the legislature.
Good way forward and crisp conclusion.
The content is diverse and well placed.
A decent attempt.
Keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Dakshina
In the introduction, only mention the India system of parliamentary government, introduction should be crisp.
You have compared both the systems in a comprehensive manner.
Issues are well explained but try to write under subheadings for better presentation.
Always give some way forward, how can we resolve these issues.
Try to cover different aspects to fetch better marks.
Good conclusion.
The content is good ab well placed.
Persistence is the key to success, keep writing !4
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Hi Sakshi
Good introduction, but need to summarise it.
Comparison is done in a good way but for comparison like this, try to make a table , it will save you some words as well as will make your answer more presentable.
Need to add more points in the issue part,
You can write-No separation of powers- Since there is no genuine separation of powers, the legislature cannot always hold the executive responsible.
-Failure to take a prompt decision- Because there is no fixed tenure enjoyed by the Council of Ministers, it often hesitates from taking bold and long-term policy decisions.
-Party politics: Party politics is more evident in the parliamentary system where partisan interests drive politicians more than national interests.
Try to write under subheadings for better presentation.
Good way forward but conclusion is missing, conclude by mention the need to revisit the system of government in India.
Avoid grammatical errors .
Keep writing ,you will improve.
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Good answer and presentation .
Can improve way forwad
Hi Sneha
Lackluster introduction, do not cite the difference in the introduction, simply mention the India system of parliamentary government.
You have compared both the systems in quite a comprehensive manner, keep it up.
Issues are well explained.
Fragment your last paragraph into two parts- way forward and conclusion.
The content is diverse and well written.
Work on space management.
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Unnati
Good introduction but need to rephrase it, grammatical errors are there.
You have compared both the systems in a good manner.
Issues are well explained.
Write some way forward, how to tackle these issues.
Good conclusion.
The content is good, diverse and well placed.
But need to work on presentation for better marks.
Work on handwriting, write neat and legible.
Improve your handwriting.
Leave proper space between the lines and the paragraphs.
Keep writing !
Hi Shweta
Write on blank white sheet.
Lackluster introduction , mention the India system of parliamentary government.
Comparison is done in a good way but for comparison like this, try to make a table , it will save you some words as well as will make your answer more presentable.
Issues are well explained.
Write some way forward how to resolve these issues.
Good conclusion.
Give proper headings and subheadings for better presentation.
Avoid grammatical errors and avoid using short forms.
Underline keywords to convince examiner easily.
Mention your payment id.
Keep writing, you will improve.