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- In the introduction briefly narrate what is mob violence.
- In the body discuss the recent examples of mob violence in the country. Explain how mob violence threatens democracy; For example, it creates communalism vibes as India. Discuss how it is an impediment for civil servants.
- Conclude with suggesting some way forward like the recent steps taken by Rajasthan government. also emphasize that Centre should adopt the practice too , need to inculcate tolerance and morality in
people etc.
Pls review
Hi Arun
In the introduction, do not define mob, define what is mob violence.
Your answer looks monotonous, give headings and subheadings to present your answer in a better structured manner.
Write the effects of mob violence, you can give points like-
-It is against the constitutional value of Liberty equality and fraternity.
-It creates an reasonable restriction on the fundamental rights ( right to life and right to freedom
of expression).
Lackluster conclusion, write some measures like some constructive reforms to tide over the grim threat of criminalization of politics which castes its terrifying shadow over large swathes of the country.
Work on content and structure.
Do not get demoralised by the marks, keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Divya
Good introduction
You have discussed the effects of mob violence in a good manner, but you did not write the reasons for it. You can give reasons like –
-The unholy nexus between politicians and the perpetrators even leads to registering of cases
against the victim itself. It adds insult to injury.
-Police officials are either too late or they are outnumbered to save the innocent as his killing
unfolds.
Rest of the answer is written in comprehensive manner, keep it up.
Adhere to word limit.
Keep working hard.
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Answer is well started.
You have discussed the effects of mob violence in a good manner, but you did not write the reasons for it. You can give reasons like –
-The unholy nexus between politicians and the perpetrators even leads to registering of cases
against the victim itself. It adds insult to injury.
-Police officials are either too late or they are outnumbered to save the innocent as his killing
unfolds.
In the way forward, you can also write about the Implementation of the Supreme Court judgment in Prakash Singh case-a police establishment board has to be constituted for internal transparency and accountability.
Good conclusion.
A decent attempt.
Keep writing, you will succeed.