“Mentor’s Comments”
Introduction-
Start your answer by writing about The Moderates and their nature of politics.
Body-
Above statement used by Extremists to criticise policies of moderates a ‘mendicancy’. Write basis of this statement using factors such as- methods and social composition of the early Congress.
In the next section bring out how this criticism is not fully justified as the National movement being in infancy. Congress being a Political party first of its kind, the masses not yet politicised, United or organised. Despite these limitations moderates played significant role.
Conclusion
End your answer with remarks that the Indian national struggle was a process not an event and contributions of one section can’t be undermined over other.
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Sumita,
Your Introduction is fine but it can improved upon.
Overall you have Written a good Answer. Content, presentation is also fine.
However these is issue of flow and arrangement of the argument.
You need not to write Criticism and Nature separately rather you should present a collective analysis. It will be more appropriate to the Demand of the question i.e. politics were a part time affair for moderates.
Use key words given in the question in your answer. Like politics as a part time affair, Congress was not a Political party but a 3 days Show (you need to write 2-3 lines on this aspect also like no regular meetings, no ground presence etc). It will make your answer more relatable to the question.
Rest is fine. You have shown a good Improvement. Keep Practicing to improve further.
I’m going to start evaluation form 28th June onwards. In case you haven’t written any question write it it will be evaluated in second round.
Keep Practicing 🙂
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Sonal,
Introduction is written well but it’s lengthy.
Overall content of the question is good but you need to check the word limit. It’s a 10 marks ques so you should have Written it 2 pages.
Presentation is good but arrangement of the Arguments can be Improved upon rather then dealing with methods, and Criticism SEPARATELY you need to present a collective analysis so to make ‘politics a part time affair’ aspect more clear.
Use key words given in the question appropriately to make your Arguments more relatable with the demand of the question like politics a part time affair, Congress not a party (write one-two lines for this aspect as well using argument like one in a year meeting, no proper structure, disconnect with the masses etc)
The demands can be Written along with contribution section.
Over all it’s a fine Attempt. But you can do better. Keep writing 🙂
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Shubhashree,
Your Introduction is well articulated.
There is good flow in the answer. Content is also fine. Arrangements of the argument is also very well.
To make you answer more effectively linked with the question, you should use key words given in the question in your answer. Like politics as a part time affair, Congress was not a Political party but a 3 days Show (you need to write 2-3 lines on this aspect also like no regular meetings, no ground presence etc).
Rest is fine. Keep Practicing 🙂
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Utkarsha,
Your Introduction is fine.
Your presentation is very Poor.
First of all question doesn’t wanted you to write Criticism of moderates by Extremists. Even the way you have Written criticism is not good. Better to make a section, or write in points format no need write same headings again and again.
Even in mentor’s Comments I didn’t asked you to write Criticism. Rather you should have Written the basis of this statement using your content. So you need to mold your arguments.
First you had to depict how politics were a part time affair and why Congress under them was limited affair.
Use key words given in the question appropriately to make your arguments more relatable with the demand of the question like politics a part time affair ( moderates were layers, zamindars or businessmen first than politicians, no regular opposition to British policies, no ideological basis and clear vision to move forward, demand of reforms under Overall British setup) and Congress not a party (write one-two lines for this aspect as well using argument like one in a year meeting, no proper structure, disconnect with the masses etc)
You have enough content. These are Practice questions Give time, understand the Demand and mold your content as per the demand of the question.
Section in against the statement is written fine. Conclusion is fine.
Remember the Suggestions given to you. Work on them. I believe you can do much better. Keep Practicing 🙂
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Fauziya.
Your Introduction is remotely related to the question.
Presentation is very poor. Arrangements of argument is such that it’s hard to make sense.
You have Written Whatever you know. Rather you need to write what is asked in the Question.
This question essentially asked you to depict that for Moderates politics a part time affair here you need to write arguments like moderates were layers, zamindars or businessmen first than politicians, no regular opposition to British policies, no ideological basis and clear vision to move forward, demand of reforms under Overall British setup.
Due to this part time politics of Moderates Congress not a party as once in a year meeting, no proper structure, disconnect with the masses etc.
Then in second half you had to negate the statement.
Conclusion is the most relatable part of your answer.
After writing read your own answer. Do some self evaluation.
You have enough content. These are Practice questions Give time, understand the Demand and mold your content as per the demand of the question.
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Rajlaxmi,
Your Introduction is Good.
Your first part of the question do not satisfactorily justify the demand of the question.
You need to concise section about Moderates. And give more space to the demand of the Question.
You must use key words/ phrases given in the question to make your answer more relatable.
In first section You need to add more points like Moderates were layers, zamindars or businessmen first than politicians, no regular opposition to British policies, no ideological basis and clear vision to move forward, demand of reforms under Overall British setup.
Due to this part time politics of Moderates Congress not a party as once in a year meeting, no proper structure, disconnect with the masses etc.
Second section is fine but you need manage space better in this answer and give more space to second section.
Conclusion is fine but you can write more effective one.
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Ankita,
You have Written a very long Introduction. It covers whole first page. Concise what ever written on the first page into 5-6 lines.
You started your answer in the right lines but you have Written only two points for the core section of the question.
You must use key words/ phrases given in the question to make your answer more relatable.
In first section You need to add more points like Moderates were layers, zamindars or businessmen first than politicians, no regular opposition to British policies, no ideological basis and clear vision to move forward, demand of reforms under Overall British setup.
Due to this part time politics of Moderates Congress not a party as once in a year meeting, no proper structure, disconnect with the masses etc.
Second section is fine but you need manage space better in this answer and give more space to second section.
Again Conclusion is missing in your answer, you have written long paragraphs despite suggestion of writing smaller paragraph Do not repeat mistakes this is the only way to improve.
Keep practicing 🙂
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Kartikey,
Your Conclusion is fine.
Overall content is fine but you can add more points in first section like no regular opposition to British policies, no ideological basis and clear vision to move forward, demand of reforms under Overall British setup.
Due to this part time politics of Moderates Congress not a party as once in a year meeting, no proper structure, disconnect with the masses etc.
Second section is Written fine.
You need to write better Conclusion. Given the quality of your answer which is very good such Conclusion doesn’t suits the answer.
Keep Practicing 🙂
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