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- https://indianexpress.com/article/opinion/columns/there-is-no-debate-there-has-been-a-persistent-decline-in-poverty-in-india-nfhs-data-8248201/
- In the introduction, define poverty as well as shed light on state of poverty in India.
- In the body, first mention how poverty is a result of lack of development.
- Next, mention how even development, if unplanned, can lead to poverty.
- Suggest some remedial measures.
- Conclude on an optimistic note.
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Vaibhav
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Decent attempt. Your presentation is neat and clean. You have understood the question well too.
Introduction is fine.
Poverty as lack of development has been well explained. Additionally, you could mention colonial exploitation and lack of development in agriculture (fragmentation of land etc).
In next part, some more points need to be added. Unequal distribution of resources is good. As a byproduct of development you could talk about climate change, globalisation, development of unorganized sectors etc and link them to poverty.
Remedial measures are fine.
Conclusion is decent too.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Pallab
Introduction is fine.
You have written well , however, content can be a bit more accurate.
For example, in the part where you have mentioned poverty as a byproduct of development, you have basically mentioned the loopholes in the development process. You need to talk about how development has made people poorer. You can write about unequal distribution of resources; climate change; globalisation; development of unorganized sectors etc as developmental byproducts and link them to poverty.
First part of the answer is decent, further dimensions could be added such as colonial exploitation (historical), lack of economic development (agriculture, industries etc)
In remedial measures, most pertinent points should be addressed…more important than awareness generation is putting important facilities in place- health, education, infrastructure etc. UBI could be mentioned.
Conclusion is decent.
Keep practicing. 🙂
3.5/10
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Rao
Decent attempt. Presentation is good.
Introduction is fine.
Nice use of flowchart in next part, you have mentioned the result of lack of development (poor health, earnings, opportunities etc)…few points on why we are in such a situation could also be mentioned…historic(colonial exploitation); economic (issues in agricultural and industrial development); social(less spending on education and health).
Next part explaining poverty as by product of development is good…non-inclusive and inequality are good points. Further, you could talk about climate change, globalization and development of unorganised sector and link them to poverty.
Way forward and conclusion are good, nicely written.
Keep practicing. Try to include more dimensions in the body of the answer. 🙂
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Abhishek
Decent attempt.
Introduction is good.
Poverty as lack of development is also well explained through diagram. You can add dimensions such as historical – colonial exploitation; problems with agricultural development as large section of our society is dependent on agriculture.
In next part, you have talked about non-inclusive development and that is good..but development has also resulted into usage of resources leaving less for the future (unsustainable), globalization, climate change, development of unorganized sector with job insecurity, absence of social security etc which all can be linked to poverty.
Way forward is decent, some newer ideas like universal basic income could be mentioned.
A concluding statement would be good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Alankrit
Introduction seems like a way forward. Better, you can define poverty here and give some data around it.
After that the question is basically asking two things- you have addressed the first part that is, poverty as lack of development well. Lack of healthcare, education and employment facilities are good points in this regard. Further dimensions that could be added are historical (colonial exploitation), economic (lack of agricultural, industrial development).
However, you have missed out on the next part. You need to show how poverty has been a by product of development- you can talk about unsustainable development (paucity of resources), non-inclusive development etc. Further, globalization, climate change, development of unorganized sector with job insecurity, absence of social security etc all can be linked to poverty.
Way forward is good. Conclusion is fine too. Try to break up the question in parts, will ensure you don’t miss out on anything.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Megha
Introduction is good.
Next part about poverty as a result of lack of development is also well written. Historical dimension of colonial exploitation and social dimension on poor health and education spending and facilities can be added.
In next part, content could be better. First think of what development has led to in modern era – climate change, globalisation, development of unorganized sector in India with poor job security, social security, unsustainable and non-inclusive development (paucity of limited resources)- and then all of this could be linked to poverty.
Way forward and conclusion are good. Some newer ideas like UBI could be added.
Keep practicing. 🙂
3.5/10
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