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- https://indianexpress.com/
article/opinion/columns/ falling-government-school- enrolment-is-alarming-and-it- needs-to-be-addressed-soon- 7397329/ - In the intro, mention the figures about the proportion of children attending government schools in India.
- In the body, mention the importance of free and quality school education for the development of the country. In the next part, mention the implications of decline for meritocracy, equality and employability etc. In suggestions, mention reforms in governance, performance management and use of English language for instructions.
- Conclude by mentioning the urgent need to address the issue given its importance for the nation.
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Yamini
Nice attempt, but you need to make it a bit concise for 10 marks. Introduction is good. After that instead of writing a full section on role of government, you can mention that free and quality school education is both a constitutional right and the need of the hour for the country and move on.
Points in implications are good. No need for much changes. In ways to deal you can divide it into 3 parts- it will make the answer more coherent- a)performance management of students, teachers as well as schools b)governance- local autonomy, NEP at national level, reducing number of schools, cluster-approach can be taken and c) English education. Mention examples only after some steps for example we know that teachers are under-qualified- suggest some steps to solve this issue- just mentioning it will not be enough.
Conclusion is good.
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Sumita
Good attempt. Introduction is fine. I think it should be article 21A. Importance part is also fine. In impacts you can link it with vicious cycle of poverty. Also you can mention adverse impacts on girl child, nutrition issues due to drop out. Rest of the points are good.
In suggestions, include some points from National Education policy, accessible schools, cluster-based approach etc. Also you can talk about performance management of teachers, students and schools as well on various parameters. Quality issues are very important since most of children lack in even basic skills of reading, numerical ability etc even after years of attending school.
Conclusion is good. Keep writing. 🙂
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Subhashree
You can frame the introduction better. Actually the figure declined to 45%, not increased. Also you can mention the fundamental right to education under article 21 A and state’s failure to honour it.
In effects, you can link it with vicious cycle of poverty, non-employable. Also adverse effects on girl child, poor levels of nutrition due to dropping out of children can be mentioned.
Give a sub heading for suggestions. include some points from National Education policy, accessible schools, cluster-based approach etc. Also suggest some steps to improve teacher-student performance. Rest of the points are fine.
Conclusion is fine. Keep writing. 🙂
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Ankita
Introduction is fine. After the question is asking about implications of the decline. You need to write what effect it will have in future. In challenges and issues you have again just mentioned the poor condition.
Mention the importance of free and quality school education for the development of the country. In implications mention impact on meritocracy, equality and employability etc. You can link it with vicious cycle of poverty. Also you can mention adverse impacts on girl child, nutrition issues due to drop out.
Suggestions and conclusion are good. You can include some points from National Education policy, accessible schools, cluster-based approach etc.
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Kartikey
Introduction is fine. Also you can mention the fundamental right to education under article 21 A and state’s failure to honour it.
You have mixed up reasons of decline and implications of decline. First two points can be exclusively said to be reasons of decline. Points 3,4 and 5 are fine. In implications mention impact on meritocracy, equality and employability etc. You can link it with vicious cycle of poverty. Also you can mention nutrition issues due to drop out(mid day meal).
Suggestions part is fine. Also in accordance with NEP, you can talk about making school education accessible to all, cluster-based approach to avoid mushrooming of irregular schools, community-involvement, emphasizing local governance etc
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