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- https://indianexpress.com/article/world/climate-change/cop27-un-climate-change-meet-compensation-mechanism-8253303/
- In the introduction, mention the inclusion of “finance for loss and damage” in the main agenda at the COP27 summit being held in Egypt.
- Next, explain the concept of loss and damage and how it is related to climate justice.
- Next, explain briefly what effect will this inclusion have.
- Write a way forward.
- Conclude appropriately.
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Arjun
Your concept is fine.. Presentation could be better.
Introduction first paragraph is decent.
Next, explain the term loss and damage a bit-
results from both extreme weather events such as cyclones, droughts etc and slow-onset changes such as sea level rise, desertification, land degradation etc; includes both economic and non-economic losses. Disagreement between developed and non-developing countries is well explained.
Also, some impacts of inclusion can be added- will give hope to the vulnerable communities facing disasters like floods in Pakistan, drought in Europe, will have the effect of mainstreaming the issue and will renewed the fight for climate justice.
2nd last paragraph can be a good way forward.
Conclusion is a bit different, you can emphasize upon the importance of this inclusion in the wake of ever increasing climate change issues.
Try to give subheadings for different sections for better presentation. Check out the model answers.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Rao
Presentation of the answer is good, content is also fine. You can explain the term ‘loss and damage’ a bit after writing the introduction which is fine- results from both extreme weather events such as cyclones, droughts etc and slow-onset changes such as sea level rise, desertification, land degradation etc; includes both economic and non-economic losses.
Need for the loss and damage funding is well explained… Some recent examples of severe disasters such as flood in Pakistan, droughts in Europe could be mentioned which brought the issue in focus.
In way forward, you can mention that just inclusion in the agenda is not enough, actual provision for climate disaster compensation should be there.. Something on the lines of Loss and Damage Finance Facility.
Conclusion is decent.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Abhishek
First part of your answer is good and quite content rich.
Introduction is good.
Need for loss and damage finance is also well argued by talking about the disagreement between developed and non-developing countries. Examples mentioned are also quite good.
However, before all of this you could briefly explain loss and damage and bring out how it is related to climate justice- results from both extreme weather events such as cyclones, droughts etc and slow-onset changes such as sea level rise, desertification, land degradation etc; includes both economic and non-economic losses.
In way forward, you have gone a bit broad by mentioning ways to tackle climate change. However, the question is focused on loss and damage, so, you can mention that just inclusion in the agenda is not enough, actual provision for climate disaster compensation should be there.. Something on the lines of Loss and Damage Finance Facility.
Conclusion is decent.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Yogesh
Some aspects of the answer arr fine.. Introduction is good, disagreement between developed and developing countries is also well explained. Concluding statement is also fine, decent way ahead.
Presentation of the answer needs to be improved.. Try to give different subheadings… After intro, you could briefly explain loss and damage and bring out how it is related to climate justice- results from both extreme weather events such as cyclones, droughts etc and slow-onset changes such as sea level rise, desertification, land degradation etc; includes both economic and non-economic losses.
Next, the need for a loss and damage finance facility can also be brought out by talking about the human induced climate change and mentioning some recent examples such as the Pakistan floods and droughts in Europe.
Also, handwriting needs to be improved further. Check out some other answers.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Pallab
Decent attempt.
You have got the crux of the answer right.
Introduction is good.
After that, first, briefly try to explain loss and damage and bring out how it is related to climate justice- results from both extreme weather events such as cyclones, droughts etc and slow-onset changes such as sea level rise, desertification, land degradation etc; includes both economic and non-economic losses.
Impact of such a facility on developing and poor countries is well explained.
Way forward is also decent. Rather than just inclusion in the agenda and discussions, you can mention that a Loss and Damage Finance Facility is made active.
You can give subheadings for different parts such as – explaining loss and damage; impact of thr inclusion; way forward etc to improve the presentation of your answer.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Shubham
Decent attempt. Introduction is good. Loss and damage is also explained. Next, you could mention the need for a loss and damage finance facility by talking about the human induced climate change and mentioning some recent examples such as the Pakistan floods and droughts in Europe.
Disagreement between the developed and developing countries could also be mentioned here.
Advantages are also decent. Climate justice is talked about.
In way forward, commitment every year is mentioned but that is not the case, this is the first time loss and damage has been included in the main agenda. Choose your word a bit carefully. You can mention the institutionalization of a Loss and Damage Finance Facility.
Conclusion is fine.
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Megha
Good attempt. Almost all aspects of the answer are covered.
Introduction is good. Loss and damage has been explained along with its relation to climate justice.
However, other than mentioning the responsibility of developed countries, you can briefly also describe what all it entails- results from both extreme weather events such as cyclones, droughts etc and slow-onset changes such as sea level rise, desertification, land degradation etc; includes both economic and non-economic losses.
Effects of the inclusion and way forward are fine.
Conclusion can be a bit short.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Hello
Good attempt. Both the content and presentation of the answer are good.
Introduction is good.
Evolution, significance and challenges are also well written. In challenges, you could elaborate a bit upon the disagreement between developed and affected countries and why it has been so hard to include it in the main agenda.
Way ahead is good.
A concluding statement can be added.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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