Mentor’s Comments-
- Start with a brief introduction around Gandhiji’s moral philosophy.
- Highlight how the core of Gandhiji’s philosophy lies in internal moral power.
- Conclude accordingly.
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Mentor’s Comments-
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Smriti
Decent attempt. Introduction is fine. The points you have mentioned are good.. In satyagraha you can link it with the requirement of strong will power and strong moral character as it requires fortitude and self control to stick to in time of hardships.
Also mention can be made of Swaraj, which included freedom of individual from his internal vices..importance of means with respect to ends can be mentioned and you can link it with Gandhiji’s political philosophy.
Other concepts are fine too, but just explaining the terms won’t be enough, mention how internal moral character is important for achieving them. For example, Gandhiji’s idea of trusteeship can be linked in point no. 3 of yours that how modern civilization encourages consumerism and materialism and trusteeship could be a solution. Also, you can use few examples.
In conclusion, you have continued the points only, better write a broader concluding statement.. For example, the need to practice Gandhiji’s ideas in modern age of increasing self-centricity and globalization.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Pratik
Good attempt. Presentation is good, content is also fine.
Intro is good.
In next part, points are fine. In point no. 3 and 4, you can relate it to how internal moral character is required to achieve those objectives as you have done in other points. Further, you can talk about Gandhiji’s concept of Swaraj which included freedom of man from his internal vices. Means over ends can also be mentioned, Gandhiji’s critique of modern civilization and its features such as materialism and consumerism can be mentioned too along with point no. 5, you can relate it to the moral character of being humane, considerate, thinking of the poor(Gandhiji’s talisman) and the idea of sharing profits via trusteeship.
Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Pranav
Decent attempt, introduction and conclusion are fine.
In the body, you have mentioned some good points, but relate them to how they require a strong internal moral character. For example, in non-violence you can mention the requirement to be courageous internally, because acc to Gandhi non-violence was not for the weak. Gandhiji’s philosophy of means over ends can ne mentioned, similarly his idea of swaraj which included freedom of a human being from his internal vices can be mentioned. Gandhiji’s critique of modern civilization and its features such as materialism and consumerism can be mentioned too, you can relate it to the moral character of being humane, considerate, thinking of the poor despite yourself being in a better position (Gandhiji’s talisman) and the idea of sharing profits via trusteeship.
Also, try to use the keywords of Gandhiji’s philosophy such as satyagraha, sarvodaya, swaraj etc.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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