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- https://indianexpress.com/article/opinion/editorials/weathering-the-storm-6206920/
- The recently released IMD report ‘State of The climate of India’ confirms that extreme weather events have become more frequent in the county.
- In the intro, briefly describe what is weather events and what are the normal frequency with which the used to be extreme.
- In the main body describe what extreme weather events are- like unusual and excessively hot or cold weathers, above normal intensities of the cyclones, excessive rainfalls or abnormal dry spells. Also explain the relationship between climate change and its relation with such extreme weather, and how climate change begets such extreme weather events.
- Moreover, describe the consequences India is likely to face as a result of such events.
- Conclude by suggesting the need for the intervention to stop climate change and disaster preparedness.
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Akanksha keep your paragraph on shorter side. They are too bulky for UPSC standards.
The answer and its content are flawless.
You have covered all the basic details needed here.
The language is good but do use shorter statements.
The subheadings should be written separately from the content.
Underline key points.
The balance between the 1st and 2nd part is very good.
Decent structure.
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The 2nd paragraph is very lengthy. Avoid this.
The length of your statements in various bullet points is also large. Keep your statements short and crisp.
The content in the answer is fine.
Could have added a couple of more points in each subheading to give a perfect depth to your answer.
The structure is fine.
Good concluding remarks
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The content is to the point and quite informative.
The overall language and explanation are decent.
The structure is also decent.
But write clearly and give some space between changing subheadings.
You can also use flowcharts in between to bring in the XFactor in your answer.
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The overall content is decent.
The explanation and coverage done is fantastic.
The points are well placed and the structure is smooth.
Good presentation.
Very good use of the diagram in the 2nd part of your answer.
But the way forwards are missing from the answer. Give some steps as in what more needs to be done by various stakeholders.
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The content is general because of the weak explanation in the 1st part of the answer.
There were some very good points that could have been discussed in the relationship between CC and EW.
The 2nd part is handled in a decent manner.
The overall direction of the answer is decent.
Good way forwards
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The depth is missing in the 1st part of the answer.
Also, a concrete way forward is missing from the discussion.
The 2nd part is handled nicely.
The content needs to be specific and explanation needs to be on point.
You could have used some diagram in the 1st part
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The relationship between CC and EW needs to be discussed with more detail.
Right now your 1st part of the answer lacks depth.
Remember, all the 15 marks question need 6 7 points in each subheading. Otherwise, the content will not do justice to the demand of the question and marks allotted to it.
The 2nd part and the way forward are handled well.
The language in each part is fine and the presentation is fine.