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- In the introduction define what ‘information sharing’ and ‘transparency’ are.
- In the body you can bring out the significance of these elements – Information is fundamental need of humans to perform various tasks. It has been found that the ability to seek, receive and circulate information is crucial to secure human rights. An information-driven society leads to transparency and accountability. Then discuss the relevance of the two to good governance. Move onto suggest measures for ensuring Information sharing and transparency in government. You can quote the existing efforts of the government in this direction(Name few policies and programme aiming in this dimension).
- Conclude that Information sharing and transparency are vital components for any government to
enhance the living of society.
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Hi Sumona
First thing,this is a 10 marker question so try to finish it i 2 pages.
Adhere to word limit.
In the introduction,also mention what transparency is.You can write in simple language that transparency, in governance context, is honesty and openness.
Quote some reports data if you can like you can quote the data of Transparency International.
Then mention the pillars of good governance and explain the importance of transparency and accountability,
In way forward,you have written very general points.Write some different points to get good marks.In this answer you can write repealing of the Official Secret Act as iterated by 2nd
and introducing an oath of transparency for bureaucrats and politicians can help.
Your conclusion is good.
Work hard ,you will improve.
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Hi Deepika
In introduction briefly mention what transparency and accountability are.
You have written the significance part in a decent manner.
But there is lack of content in the way forward,add few more points like we can use social audit and e-governance as a tool to strengthen good governance,there is a need to set up regional offices to reduce the geographical reach issues etc.
Think broader to get good marks.
Conclusion is good.
Work on handwriting.
Keep writing,you will improve.
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Hi Dakshina
Good introduction.
Instead of using different headings like significance of information and significance of transparency,write under one heading then give heading measures for ensuring Information sharing and transparency in government, it will make your answer better structured.
You have written good and diverse points in measures,keep it up !
Lackluster conclusion, you can mention that these two are the main pillars of good governance and what will be the impact if we improve them.
Work on spellings and handwriting.
Work hard,you will succeed.
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Hi Kritika
There is content in your introduction but need to rephrase it.
Explain the significance of transparency and information sharing
Mentioning means of information sharing is not so important.
Need to add diverse points in measures, you can read Dakshina’s answer for this part.
Underline important stuff and if quote some report’s data if possible. You can quote the data of transparency international report to get better marks.
Conclusion is good.
Keep writing!
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Hi NJ
Introduction is good but need to restructure it.
Try to link your paragraphs like you ca write that an information-driven society
leads to transparency and accountability.It will show that you have good command over content.
Before suggesting measures,write the significance of information sharing and transparency, plan the structure of your answer before writing.
You have written the measures in a decent and diverse manner,keep it up !
Lackluster conclusion,mention that these two are the main pillars of good governance and what will be the impact on society and country if we improve them.
Keep writing,you will improve.
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Hi Chester
Good introduction.
Lack of content in significance part,you can write like there are four pillars of good governance – transparency, accountability predictability and participation. Without transparency other pillars become dysfunctional.
Diversify your answer to get good marks.
There are some good points in measures but need to add more. You can add like need of strict implementation of all mandatory disclosures under Right to Information act 2005, social audit,digitization of key government records etc.
Brainstorm before writing !
Conclusion is good.
Work on basic grammar.
Keep writing,you will succeed.
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Hi Parakh
Good introduction.
Write your ‘of’ in a neat manner,it looks like &.
Use of flow chart is appreciable but mention the significance of transparency also.
Do not use short forms like info , govt etc.
Some good points but need to add content like need of introducing an oath of transparency for bureaucrats and politicians,we can use of multi-media campaigns in local languages for awareness of benefits of information sharing,need of digitization of key government records etc.
Diversify your content to fetch good marks.
Conclusion is good.
Work on handwriting.
Work hard,you will improve.