Mentor’s comment:
- https://www.thehindu.com/opinion/op-ed/should-the-fm-tweak-direct-taxes-to-spur-the-economy/article30463062.ece
- The article discuss the various possible changes that could be made to the direct tax structure and its effect on the current problem the economy is facing.
- In intro, discuss the present conundrum which we are facing regarding the economy in which we are facing the cyclic and structural slowdown simultaneously.
- In the main body discuss the various changes that can be made to the direct tax regime of the country and how that change could affect the overall economy of the country. Also cite certain facts and figures to flesh out your argument.
- Suggest the implementation of the changes as the way forward for the given situation of the economy in the question.
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There has to be a proper structure to the answer.
Therefore read the mentor’s comments beneath the question to understand the demand and required structure of the question.
The starting statement of the question should be the base of your start of the answer.
So in intro, discuss the present conundrum which we are facing regarding the economy in which we are facing the cyclic and structural slowdown simultaneously.
Then discuss the issues with the DTC once you have explained what is the direct tax.
Because without this discussion, there is no point in discussing the changes needed.
Therefore your 1st part of the answer is missing and you have jumped to the 2nd part straightaway. This is affecting your structure.
And no point of discussing the advantages of the direct tax at the end of the answer once you have discussed the way forward. These are the elements of the 1st part of the answer.
Your points and subheadings should be aligned in a certain lucid manner which is called a structure of the answer. Points should never be discussed in a haphazard manner.
In the way forward of the answer, the discussion is fine but points are over-explained. Keep your points short and crisp by keeping the length of the statements short.
Read the model answer once it is available to geta better idea.
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The 1st part of the answer has an element missing: discuss the issues with the DTC once you have explained what is the direct tax. Because without this discussion, there is no point in discussing the changes needed.
Apart from that, the overall treatment of the answer is good and points are well placed.
Good intro, though it is a bit lengthy but you will get leeway there.
The way forwards are fantastic and to the point.
The language is good.
Presentation is also fine.
A very good conclusion
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Perfect intro.
But the main body lacks proper explanation and enough points.
Discuss the issues with the DTC once you have explained what is the direct tax. Because without this discussion, there is no point in discussing the changes needed.
The discussion in the changes needed in the DTC are not wholesome.
You discussed Adam Smith’s points but failed to explain them and their relevance.
The overall discussion is general in nature and lacks depth.
Read the model answer for talking points once it is available.
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Abhishek no need to over-discuss certain things. For example, nowhere the question demands you on how to improve the economy but you have given points in the intro regarding measures that should be taken like better monetary policy transmission or recapitalization of banks etc. Stick to the demand of the question.
Also in your intro, you to link the topic of the discussion. A simple one-line statement at the end of the intro like, “In order to get things better in economic perspective, it is imperative that Government should look into the reforms of DTC.” Simple.
Then discuss the meaning of DTC and its importance and issues in the 1st part of the answer.
Then only jump to the 2nd part of the answer which will discuss the way forward.
So your 1st part is missing.
The way forwards are decent but little bit more explanation was needed there.
Good language and understanding of the topic.