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- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/op-ed/more-expansion- further-isolation/ article32015849.ece - In the intro, highlight the importance of the South China Sea as a vital sea lane to the global economy.
- In the body, mention options like pursuing defence diplomacy outreach, extending strategic partnerships, strengthening tri-service command capacity etc.
- Conclude by highlighting the need for rule-based global order respecting the international laws.
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Hi Taran
Rephrase your introduction.
Write down the context briefly , you can mention the PCA verdict.
Then explain the issues in South China Sea, you can write growing Chinese muscularity,Chinese exploration, increased protests by the other countries etc.
Then suggest what India should do.
In that along with other points, mention that India must continue to actively pursue this in the Indo-Pacific region
Follow a proper structure to get better marks.
Work on your writing language.
Improve your handwriting.
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Hi Parakh
Lackluster introduction, highlight the importance of the South China Sea as a vital sea lane to the global economy.
In the issue part, explain the growing discontent of other countries with China.
You have written in the solution part that India should leverage its position in WHO, how it will help ?
Write points like – India must continue to actively pursue this in the Indo-Pacific region by:
-Increasing military training and conduct exercises and exchanges at a higher level of complexity
-Extend Humanitarian Assistance and Disaster Relief activities
-Share patrolling of the Malacca Strait with the littoral countries, etc.
Work on content.
Improve your handwriting and presentation to get better marks.
Keep writing,you will improve.
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Hi Uttam
Work on your introduction, do not tell where is south china sea, instead highlight the importance of the South China Sea as a vital sea lane to the global economy.
You have diverted from the demand of the question, write how China is changing the status quo in the South China Sea, write points like growing Chinese muscularity,Chinese exploration, increased protests by the other countries etc.
Adhere to the demand of the question.
Increased dependency on South China Sea can never be a good option for India, brainstorm before writing.
Write points like – India must continue to actively pursue this in the Indo-Pacific region by:
-Increasing military training and conduct exercises and exchanges at a higher level of complexity
-Extend Humanitarian Assistance and Disaster Relief activities
-Share patrolling of the Malacca Strait with the littoral countries, etc.
Work on content .
Work hard,you will improve.
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Hi Deepika
Good introduction.
You have explained the issues in a comprehensive manner.
Draw a map diagram for better presentation.
Suggested strategy for India is well explained.
Good conclusion.
The content is good and well placed.
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Chester
Good introduction.
You have deviated from the demand of the question, do not write the relevance of South China Sea in such detail, the question is demanding how China is changing the status quo in the South China Sea, write points like growing Chinese muscularity,Chinese exploration, increased protests by the other countries etc.
Adhere to the demand of the question.
Suggested strategy for India is quite decent.
Good conclusion.
Work on handwriting.
Avoid using unnecessary capital alphabets in between of a sentence.
Keep writing, you will improve.
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Hi Shubham
Summarise your introduction,refrain from such long paragraphs.
Use proper headings and subheadings for better presentation.
You have deviated from the demand of the question, do not write the relevance of South China Sea in such detail, the question is demanding how China is changing the status quo in the South China Sea, write points like growing Chinese muscularity,Chinese exploration, increased protests by the other countries etc.
Adhere to the demand of the question.
You have explained the India’s role in a decent manner.
Good conclusion.
Keep writing !
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Hi Dakshina
Good introduction.
You have explained the issues in South China Sea in a decent manner.
Instead of writing- ‘building partnerships’ , give heading ‘Options for India and Way Forward’ .
Give proper heading, building partnership is a point not the heading.
Good conclusion.
The content is good and well placed.
Overall a good attempt.
Keep writing ,you will succeed.
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Hi Amandeep
Scan properly.
Work on your handwriting, write little small and avoid scribbling.
Write briefly the significance and come to the main demand of the question, how China is changing the status quo in the South China Sea, write points like growing Chinese muscularity,Chinese exploration, increased protests by the other countries etc.
Way forward is well explained.
Conclusion is missing, conclude by highlighting the need for rule-based global order respecting the international laws.
Work on presentation.
Keep working hard,you will improve.
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Hi NJ
Good introduction.
You have explained the issues part in a decent manner.
Work on space management. For example, in this question , there was no space left for conclusion, write crisp and concise so that you can cover all the aspects in the given word limit.
Use of map diagram is appreciable.
Overall the content is good and well placed.
A decent attempt !
Keep writing.
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Hi Unnati
Good introduction.
You have covered the issues really well.
Use some map diagram to present better.
It is ‘India’ not ‘india’ , work on it.
Role of India is well explained.
Overall the content is good and well placed.
Good conclusion.
Improve your handwriting, write your ‘s’ properly.
A decent attempt.
Keep writing !
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Hi Sneha
Good introduction.
Use of map diagram is appreciable.
You have deviated from the demand of the question, do not write the relevance of South China Sea in such detail, the question is demanding how China is changing the status quo in the South China Sea, write points like growing Chinese muscularity,Chinese exploration, increased protests by the other countries etc.
India’s approach is comprehensively explained, keep it up !
Good conclusion.
Be consistent , keep writing !
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Hi PSR
Good introduction.
You have explained the issues part through flow chart in a good manner.
India’s role is well explained.
Good conclusion.
Overall a decent attempt.
Avoid using short forms like fol.
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Hi Vinay
Good introduction.
Do not come directly to the options that India can exercise, write briefly the significance and come to the main demand of the question, how China is changing the status quo in the South China Sea, write points like growing Chinese muscularity,Chinese exploration, increased protests by the other countries etc.
Then come to India’s role .
Follow a proper structure.
Lackluster conclusion ,conclude by highlighting the need for rule-based global order respecting the international laws.
Work hard, you will improve.