19th November 2018 | Daily Answer Writing Enhancement

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Question 1)

Without magma man’s survival and progress would have been difficult. Comment. (150 W/ 10 M)

Question 2)

Regulatory institutions in India are still a “work in progress”, and they have not attained the kind of maturity that is needed for the emerging economy. Comment?(150 W/10 M)

Question 3)

What do you understand by artificial intelligence? How will it affect India? Discuss India’s preparedness in this field (250 W/15 M)

Question 4)

The climate change raises some serious ethical issues on the part of all stakeholder, the individuals, the nation, the next generation and the nature. Most arguments against climate change policies are short-term economic arguments of various types that almost always raise serious ethical problems. Elaborate. (150 W/10 M)

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Akshat Sikri
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Akshat Sikri

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Akshat,
-Introduction seems to be okay…
-Points and ideas brought are very general…
-2nd page…Agriculture, necessary minerals etc…These points need justification…
-Overall, the answer is too general…and appears as an average one….You need to be more specific to the points and ideas presentation….
Though nice attempt…keep practicing…
Marks awarded: 3/10

Akshat Sikri
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Akshat Sikri

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Akshat,
-Introduction is poor…You can suppliment this (Your point of intro) ideas with properly explaining what regulatory institutions are…this would have brought completeness…
-The idea like biggest democracy….autonomous institution…headed by babus…seems more irrelevant…autonomous bodies are required for a big democracy like India and it’s not at all bad….You would have brought the points…like overlapping jurisdiction, problems in capacity, lacking in ideas of ground realities, lack of accountability etc..etc..
-Only three points in issue…that too very general…
Avoid using shortcuts for words…min, govt..write in complete form…
-The suggestion in way forward is very general….and general conclusion too…

Overall an average answer…keep practicing…will improve for sure…

Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity….

Akshat Sikri
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Akshat Sikri

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Pritam Kumar
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Hello Akshat,
-The word ‘ability’ in introduction…it has been created by humans…its a composition of complex ICT capable of functioning like humans such as learning, thinking, decision making, comprehending the situation and problem solving…etc…words convey ideas…so need to use properly…Poor introduction…
-The benefits of AI has been mentioned in good way…bottlenecks are also good…
-Need to bring way forward in relevant manner…one line will not suffice…

Overall good approach…except intro and conclusion…keep practicing…will improve..
Marks awarded: 3.5/10

Akshat Sikri
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Akshat Sikri

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Akshat,
-Poor introduction….Since the question requires ethical dimensions….Introduction should and must contain some points of ethical dimensions…not in much details but in holistic manner…though mentioning quote is okay…but the focus should be on question…
-You started the conversation from somewhere in half way…
-The explanation fed to the points lack logical stand and are incomplete…
-Poor structure and poor presentation with irrelevancy in content…

overall, below average answer…keep practicing…may improve…
Keep writing…
Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity….

Imgroot
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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Imgroot,
-You have exceeded the word limit…this answer contains more than 300 words (near and around)…we need to write in 150 words….Try to sync your explanations…though you have explained beautifully but we need to shorten them…
-Ideas in introduction are very good….
-Points mentioned are good and well presented with a beautiful conclusion as well…
Your approach is nice….well attempted…
Stick to the word limit….the rest is very good…
Keep writing…
Marks awarded: 5/10

Kapiushon
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Kapiushon

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Kapiushon,
-Don’t write anything beyond the margin…
-Introduction is okay…
-Points presented are good…though need some specificity….like…outgasing formed our atmosphere millions of years ago, soil formed from it helps in agriculture activities as these soils contain various minerals…etc…etc…
Overall, good approach…nice attempt…keep writing…
Marks awarded: 5/10

Imgroot
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Imgroot

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Imgroot,
-Introduction seems to be okay…
-Under work in progress…you are talking about these institutions acts like obstructor than a facilitator…but you did not substantiated this point…further you started talking about drawbacks…
-Rest of the points are good and well explained…
-Good conclusion as well…
Overall, your approach is good except some introductory points…Nice attempt…keep practicing…
Marks awarded: 5.5/10

Satvik
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Satvik

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Satvik,
-Incomplete sentence in introduction…though ideas are good…
-Mentioning points in tabular form is not at all recommendable…we need to write in descriptive form arranging points in paragraphs…
-Third page is like rough work…too many diagrams, flowcharts wont’t work here…explain everything in paragraphs….

An structure-less answer…immature approach….

The UPSC main demands descriptive answer and hence we need to explain the points in elaborative form. shortcuts, diagrams, and flowchart won’t serve the purpose…

Refer the answer written by other aspirants and observe the pattern of framework…..Refer our model answer for better clarity in points, structure etc..

Satvik
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Satvik

Thank u sir for in- depth , comprehensive evaluation .

Satvik
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Satvik

Sir , I have a doubt , we can’t use digrammes for every question ?
Or what are cases when we can use diagrams or flow charts ?

Pritam Kumar
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Hi Satvik,
We should diagram to those question which are difficult to explain in words like while writing geography answers….but when we can explain the things in points or paragraphs we should avoid using diagrams…UPSC aspires answers to be written in language rather that diagrams and flowcharts…
I hope you got the point…

Satvik
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Satvik

Thank you sir 😊😊

Satvik
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Satvik

Sir , do you have any schedule for this programme ? So that we can read n refer particular topics for better content ?

Newton
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Newton

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Pritam Kumar
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Hello Newton,
-Words and letters in the words should be written properly. ensure that your writing does not obstruct the flow of readers…
-Leave margin on both edges of the page…as per UPSC format…

-Introduction seems to be okay…but more clarity needed…
-Point under AI in India…are mentioned without any justification and convey half idea…
-You have brough positive impacts of AI and there is no -ve impact mentioned…it does have some -ve effects…
Under India’s preparadeness…first of all India lack in data preparedness…second…lack of fund hinders R & D work…etc…More relevant points need to bring…

Structure wise the answer is okay…some points lack in content wise…
Overall it seems an average approach….keep practicing….will improve for sure…
Marks awarded: 4.5/15
Refer our model answer for better clarity…

Satvik
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Satvik

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Satvik,
-Introduction is mentioned in very general way….it also lack in ethical aspects….Since the question requires ethical dimensions.. ..Introduction should and must contain some points of ethical dimensions…not in much details but in holistic manner…

-You have mentioned about decisive steps…suddenly moved to explain three arguments…sudden breaking without any connectivity show inability to link ideas, bring connection among points….
-Don’t use symbols, shortcuts of words in answer….strictly not…going short cut will cut short the chances of scoring good…
-Overall, answer lack in content…and order of demand of the question….though the ethical dimensions mentioned are good…but need linkages and completeness…

An average answer….keep writing…will improve for sure…
Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity….

Minakshi
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Minakshi

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Minakshi,
Keep your answer neat and clean, avoid too much overwriting….
-Introduction is okay…
-Your individual points are incomplete in itself…such as Point a) and b)…
-very limited points…that too mentioned in general way….Ideas lack completeness…
Overall, this answer is an average presentation…keep writing…will improve for sure…
Marks awarded: 4/10

Minakshi
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Minakshi

Thanks Pritam! I know this answer sucks to the core! I will include more points covering other uses and signicance to improve.

Minakshi
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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Minakshi,
Keep your answer neat and clean, avoid too much overwriting and criss-crossing…
-Very good introduction…
-You have beautifully mentioned the benefits of AI…as well as concerns…
-Under India’s preparedness…some of the points are mentioned in general way…more specific points required here…like…
-India lack data collection and for which it should have to be relied on other countries, though we started collecting datas but recent SC judgement on privacy concern regarding data will certainly affect this sector in negative sense…
-Also India lag behind every country (who aspires AI) in R and D…due to lack of funds, infrastructure etc…
Overall, first two parts of the answer seems to be okay…keep writing will improve for sure…
Marks awarded: 6.5/15

Minakshi
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Minakshi

Thanks! I did lack clarity on preparedness which reflected in the answer.You remarks are valuable and I will include these points.

Imgroot
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Imgroot

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Imgroot,
-Word limit has been exceeded…focus on word limit…
-Very excellent introduction…impressive
-AI and India…give initiating line…mentioning points directly hinders linkages…
-You have brought all the positive points…but it certainly have some -ve effects also…need to show…
-Under India’s preparedness…Actually India lack in data collection and data infrastructure…mere collecting data of human information will not suffice in AI. it requires data of Human behaviour from all aspects…talking, walking, behaving etc…for reference…
-The rest of the points are good…with a good conclusion…

Overall a very good answer…some modification may make this answer excellent…keep writing…
Marks awarded: 7.5/15

Puru Rajput
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Puru Rajput

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Puru Rajput,
-You exceeded the word limit..we need to write in 150 words, but this answer contains above 250 words…
-Don’t write any letter, numbering, symbol etc. beyond margin…
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-Ideas in introduction is okay…but its too long…
-Under issues…some of the points are good…but some points are of lesser relevant…like first two points (on 1st page)..rest points are okay…You need to sync the points…merge two or three points which are similar like in one…(in order to deal with word limit)…learn to articulate the sentences…
-Rest of the points are good in idea-wise…need to work on presentation…

Good approach overall, keep practicing…will improve further…Keep writing…
Marks awarded: 4/10

prafull sharma
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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Prafull,
-Your answer exceeds the word limit…
-Very good introduction…
-Points and ideas presented are good and well arranged…
-Very good conclusion as well…
Overall, nice attempt…well approached…
However, need to sync the points and ideas in order to adhere to the word limit…
Keep writing…word limit will be fixed with practice…
Marks awarded: 5.5/10

Puru Rajput
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Puru Rajput

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Puru Rajput,
-You seem to be exceeding the word limit…
-The language used in introduction and answer seems too colloquial with mixed up ideas…no logical arrangement of ideas…two para have been wasted in introduction only…POOR INTRODUCTION
-You are not focusing what the question requires, rather, I feel your focus is to feed as much as ideas you can in your answer…This approach is certainly wrong…Mention what is most and most relevant to the question…
-You have not mentioned about ‘how AI will affect India?’…
-Though some of the points you have mentioned in India’s preparedness are good…but lack logical arrangement….

Overall, this answer can certainly be termed as a structure-less answer…with too many irrelevant points…an below average approach…keep practicing….will improve for sure…

Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity….

Puru Rajput
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Puru Rajput

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Puru Rajput

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Kapiushon
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Kapiushon

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Kapiushon,
-Ideas in introduction is okay…but it need logical arrangement….
-Points brought in positive benefits of AI are okay….but there are certainly -ve outcomes as well which also need to be mentioned….
-Apart from the points you have mentioned…India lack in research work and there is no support for its development…etc…
-Though rest of the points are okay…and presentation also appears to be good overall…keep writing…
Marks awarded: 5/15

Puru Rajput
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Puru Rajput

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Imgroot
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Imgroot

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Imgroot,
-Introduction is okay…but it lacks ethical aspects…Since the question requires ethical dimensions.. ..Introduction should and must contain some points of ethical dimensions…not in much details but in holistic manner…How an holistic introduction should look like…There are many ways to mention introduction…one way can be like…

“Climate affects all, whether in positive or negative way. The problem arises when, human beings or other living organisms get threatened for survival. Further, when human contribution further deteriorate, the ethical issues arises. However, the broader argument to deal with climate change revolves around economic spending and related outcomes but honest dealing in economic aspects further adds to moral thinking of humanity”…

-Your answer does not have ethical points…Too general presentation…we need to bring points which involve broader economic-ethical aspects…

Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity….

Though nice attempt…keep practicing…will improve for sure…keep writing…
Marks awarded: 2.5/10

Abhinav Mathur
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Abhinav Mathur

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Abhinav,
-You need to work on you language asap…maturity in your language is what required…learn to articulate the language…
-Introduction seems poor….Magma is found below the crust…what comes out through the vent is called Lava…when lava solidifies, it forms igneous rocks….
-Under necessary for survival…points are presented in very general way…some of the points seem irrelevant…Also the points lack completeness…
-There is no conclusion in your answer…
Overall, this is a below average answer…far from fulfilling the demand of the question….
Though nice approach…keep practicing….will improve for sure…
Keep writing…
Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity….

Abhinav Mathur
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Abhinav Mathur

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Abhinav,
-Very poor introduction…2nd para is repeating the same words of the question…shows you lack in idea development…and have confined your thinking….
-Ideas mentioned are too general…These points are like simple functioning…
You would have brought points like…overlapping jurisdiction, problems in capacity, lacking in ideas of ground realities, delay disposal, lack of accountability etc..etc..(apart from the points what you have mentioned)…More specificity in points is what required…
-Your points in way forward are contradictory…because you want these steps to be taken but have not shown that these are also the problems while discussing the issues of Regulatory Institutions….

Overall, below average answer…which lack in many respects…keep practicing…will improve for sure…
Keep writing…

Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity….

Abhinav Mathur
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Abhinav Mathur

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Abhinav,
-The use of improper word in intro did not convey what actually you wanted to explain…Is it only constellation? certainly not…
-There can be many ways to introduce the topic (any topic)….
-AI is the smart version of technological combination capable with multiple functions with efficiency involving learning, thinking, decision making, problem solving and their implementation….etc….etc…
-Introduction should show broader concept of ideas…which ultimately reflects the length of individual thinking….
– You have brought only positive benefits of AI…however, it does have negative impact as well…
-Points under India’s preparedness are incomplete…without any justification…
-There is no way forward as well..or conclusion…
-Overall, this is a below average answer…
Though you tried with good attempt…keep practicing, will improve for sure…Keep writing…
Marks awarded: 4/15

Abhinav Mathur
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Abhinav Mathur

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Abhinav,
-Your answer is not at par with the question and lacks in many respects….first this is the question of ethics so intro should contain some of ethical issues…
2nd, Individual points are mentioned in haphazard manner without any logical arrangement…3rd, Individual points are incomplete in themselves…4th, there is no linkages of ideas and among points you have mentioned….
-Also the quote of Mahatma Gandhi, what does it signifies here? you have not related the quote to the question and ideas of points you have mentioned…Rest of the points are incomplete…and doesn’t convey complete meaning…
-Also, no way forward…or conclusion…

Overall, this is a below average answer with many drawbacks…

Though you tried with good attempt…keep practicing will improve for sure…keep writing…
Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity….

Zendagi_ migzara
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Zendagi_ migzara

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Priyadarshi,
-Introduction seems to be okay…
-Contribution done by regulatory body…If we mention the contribution of each regulatory body one by one, it will exceed our word limit and still we will not be able to bring sufficient points as per the requirement of the question…We need to identify the common benefits as well as the common problems to such institutions….like overlapping jurisdiction, problems in capacity, lacking in ideas of ground realities, delay disposal, lack of accountability etc..etc..
-In the intro itself, you have mentioned that, the they have played positive role and lag in some…but none of the points talk about lag…or drawbacks….
-conclusion seems to be okay…as per the content…
Overall, the points contain narrow ideas and are not presented holistically….such answer is termed as average…
Though attempt is good…well tried…
Keep writing will improve for sure…
Marks awarded: 3/10

Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity…

Zendagi_ migzara
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Zendagi_ migzara

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Priyadarshi,
-Answer is good…presentation wise…
-Introduction seems to be good…
-However, the negative points needs bit elaboration…
-Also you have brought very general points in India’s preparation…Here more specific points would be like…India’s lackness in data collection, Problem in funding and hence very low research and development in this field…etc….etc….etc….
-Though points in way forward are good….
Overall attempt is good…But few specific points would have made this answer excellent…Nice approach…keep writing…

Marks Awarded: 4.5/10

Zendagi_ migzara
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Zendagi_ migzara

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Priyadarshi,
-Since the question requires ethical dimensions….Introduction should and must contain some points of ethical dimensions…not in much details but in holistic manner…
-Point 1 is talking about only one aspect…i.e. rising cost…however, it does not talk about the monopoly of oil producing states who violate the principles of agreements meant for climate change…
-Point 2 need clarification as it only says expenditure will lead to decrease in GDP…However, the argument here by many nations is that saving the GDP is more important than environment….environment can be saved later when we (nation) will become developed…
-Under job loss…the argument is that…due to creation of many rules and regulations will restrict many companies and may shut them leaving large number of people jobless…big question on ethical ground of survival of many people…..Ideas in Point 3 is irrelevant…
Conclusion could have been more holistic…
Overall, it’s an average answer…could have been much better if broader perspective have been linked to your points and ideas…Though nice attempt…Keep practicing…will improve for sure…
Keep writing…
Marks awarded: 4/10

Shivani Sharma
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Shivani Sharma

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Pritam Kumar
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Hello Shivani,
-Using shortcut for word is not recommendable…write the word in complete form….
-Mixed up idea in introduction….lacks clarity…poor intro…
-Magma is what found below the earth’s crust. when it comes out of the vent is called lava and cools and solidifies getting converted into igneous rocks….
-Points on 2nd page are good…last one need elaboration…
-Points and ideas on third page are incomplete…explain further to bring clarity….
-Overall, this is an average answer…with simple ideas and points…Keep writing…will improve for sure…

Marks awarded: 3.5/10

-Refer our model answer or other best answer reviewed for better clarity…

Shivani Sharma
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Shivani Sharma

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Shivani,
-Your language lack maturity…need to articulate your sentences…
-Introduction lack clarity…
-Points of positive and negative effects…These point are too general…these points need elaboration…these are just like intro and lack completeness…explain with relevant ideas…just mentioning will not serve the purpose…
-Points of India’s preparedness are okay…with challenges below…
-Conclusion could have been much better…more holistic ideas could have been brought in it…
Overall, good attempt…work to bring more clarity in your presentation…
Keep writing..
Marks awarded: 6/15

Shefali kashyap
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Shefali kashyap

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Pritam Kumar
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Hi Shefali,
-Your introduction is not clarifying what actually it (AI) is…not mentioned that it is a form of technological advancement…
-your way of introducing shows that…you assume that the reader knows something…but in actual sense you need to tell everything…assuming that the reader is reading with the sense of knowing/getting everything from your answer only…assume reader’s mind is empty…
-Points under opportunities for India are good…though health, security etc. can be added…
-You are not talking about India’s preparedness…points like…lack of data collection, data infrastructure, regulation, skilled manpower, low intensity of AI research in India etc…can be included.
-There is no conclusion…
-Overall, this answer seems a bit more than average one…some point asked in question is avoided…Though nice attempt…keep practicing…will improve for sure….
Marks awarded: 4.5/15

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Pritam Kumar
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Please mention your correct Id, as the Id mentioned by you is incorrect…

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Hello how to comment

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I just joined ….can my answer be reviewed

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yes it will be. Please start posting answers.

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hi…

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